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Thank you so much to everyone who has read this story. I'd love to hear your comments on this part specifically and/or on the story as a whole.

~Anna

Anna,

Very nice ending to a very good rewrite of this episode. I am glad to know that Earl really doesn;t want to kill Superman and that he isn't really attracted to Denzler. I really like the way you shift between Lois and Clark and Earl and Julianna and how their thoughts are mirroring each other - I know it happened in the episode, but yours is better

Denzler is one of the best-written psychopaths I've ever had the pleasure to read about. I'll let you decide if that's a compliment or not.

As soon as you mentioned Julianna struggling to get between the seats, I started grinning and thinking, "car horn! yes!" I *am* a little disappointed that Lois didn't get to do anything heroic (Tank, no doubt, will be even more so), but her introspection was great, so you're forgiven. I must say, though, that even if my husband had rescued me from the jaws of death, I would *not* be in the mood for kisses after having duct tape ripped off my hands and mouth. Ow, ow, ow.

Nice wrap-up at the end. I'm so pleased that things turned out well for our foursome. Thanks for a fun ride, Anna, and I look forward to your next story, soon!

Hazel

Nicely done, Anna. Previous posters have picked out all the things I wanted to comment on and said pretty much what I would - enjoyed the switching dialogue, was a little disappointed that Lois didn't get to honk the car horn while Juliana went over the bridge <g>, but then we wouldn't have had smoochies when Superman rescued her if you'd done it that way. Or if we did you'd have had us after you with pitchforks. <G>



Thanks for a fun story.

LabRat

Hi,

Great story.

So finally the real ending. It's good. Nicely wrapped up. With smoochies.

I like it. But I still prefer my ending

Just check your file again for more comments of me and read what the others said. No more inspiration to give more fdk.

Saskia

yay! nick of time rescue! go clark!

i like the car horn, and i, for one, am glad that it was juliana. clark did all the rescuing, so it's nice to see someone else make it possible, for once.

the mirroring worked out really well in that sense, too... earl trying whatever he can think of, but being ineffective, clark going nuts but then managing to save the day, lois calmly thinking through her options but finding nothing, and julianna panicing and then coming up with a last-minute save.

one thing, though... he used duct tape?! man, he really is evil! the most insidiously evil tape known to humankind... wow.

i was a bit surprised by denzler's sudden need for exposition... given his usual sniper tactics, it struck me as odd. i guess he kidnapped them because he didn't want to shoot them in public, and he told them why because he wasn't used to spending time with his victims?

great ending, too. i know it's been said, but i really like your transitions, and you ended on such a sweet note, too.

great job.

Paul

Anna

WOW! A fantastic ending!

Thanks for sharing this great story. I enjoyed it immensely and look forward to reading your next venture.

Tricia

Anna,
good part
well written and great ending
ditto others
merry

I'm sorry it took me so long to reply to all of your wonderful comments. RL has taken a hold of me lately, but I really want to let you know that I appreciate all of you reading this story.

Thank you, Alicia! That was one of the aspects of the episode that I liked and I wanted to preserve it as best I could. I'm really glad that it worked.
Oh, I definitely take that as a complement, Hazel! Denzler even scared me sometimes.
Oh my goodness, you're right! I'll have to add a couple of lines to that effect before I send this off to the archive. Thanks for the heads up!
Yes, Labby, I took that into consideration. I was repeatedly reminded to have plenty of smoochies by one of my betas, so I would have been lynched if I'd not delivered. Plus, I kinda like smoochies too.
LOL, Maria! That's very true.
And there is the smoochie fanatic I mentioned earlier. You all can thank Sas for every smoochie in this story.
Thanks, Paul. I'm particularly partial to episodes where characters besides LnC get to make the rescue. I'm glad that you liked how I used Juliana to wrap this up.
That's pretty much it, Paul. He mentioned earlier in the story that he would have to make their deaths different because he didn't want them linked to the others. I suppose being out of his element made him a little more talkative.
Thanks Tricia! I'm glad that you (and others) enjoyed this story. I'm currently working on a long, angsty, Alt-Clark story. I realize that saying that will probably make some people nag me, but I hope to have lots of writing time during my upcoming summer break so the nagging might have an effect.
Thank you, Merry!

I can never say how ecstatic and appriciative I am that you all read this and had such wonderful and helpful comments through out the story. Thanks so much to everyone!

~Anna

Drat, there I thought you said you were writing about the Alt Kerths... /me hits head on keyboard... what was I thinking? Why would you do that? Maybe I'm just working too hard on certain things, or I'm really loosing my head...

Just come back with more fic Anna! Preferably with smoochies <g>

Saskia