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So what's Lois doing with Jimmy? And did you notice a certain name change in the way someone is now thinking of himself?

/you forgot to blue arrow this part/

No idea with Jimmy. Okay, she might be teaching how to read and write or draw pictures.
KAL: What do you mean you're nude modeling for Jimmy?
LOIS: I find it the best way to hold his attention.
JIMMY: it works too.
KAL: Well, no more unchaperoned nude modeling. If you're going to be nude, Lois, I have to be there as well.
JIMMY: I don't know if I want to draw THAT.
KAL: um... er... uh... that's not exactly what I meant.
LOIS: Sure about that, Smallville? /actually, this Lois doesn't have a nickname like that for Kal, does she?/

Nope. Totally missed that Kal now thinks of himself as Clark. Too sucked into the story to notice glaring details such as that.

I did notice him and Ollie "Arrow" hiding behind the barrels together whispering.
PIRATES: We *all* noticed that. That means he's not into women! Lois is free-bait!
CLARK: Ooops.
For a minute there I thought Clark was going to send Lois with Ollie for her protection and Lois was going to have to try her hands at seducing yet another man.
LOIS: I really thought this would be easier than this. It is in all those Gothic Pirate romances I read... I mean that Cloe reads and told me about when I really bored, not that I've own the whole series or anything. I have no idea what I'm talking about at all.

If Tess has sent away the staff, who is going to feed the Ex-governor in the basement?

What? No mention of his 'missing' daughter as well? It's so nice that everyone cares about a gently bred woman lost in the West Indies.

No, I'm sure she'd much rather stay on the pirate ship without protection. Oh, wait, this is Lois.

At first, I thought it was Lois who volunteered to sleep in the hammock.

I thought they were going to try and be nicer to one another.

Um... I thought he said he was going to work doing his 'day watch'. Why would he go to the pit?

Thanks

You will find out what's going on soon. And no ... no nickname. Didn't seem appropriate for a historical fic, even though this is supposed to be Erica Durance's Lois. Plus she doesn't know that he has any connection to any place called Smallville.

Really? Wow, you missed it. Well, glad I pointed it out then.

LOL. You think that is where Lois gets all her knowledge from? Because I did tell you that there is NO actual experience for her, didn't I.

The question of whether anyone saw them is a good one though. There was a lot of fighting going on and they did hide, but ... who knows.

Who indeed? This is not a mistake ...

Not enough time for such a deep conversation. Just enough time for Ollie to tell the basics ...

Yeah, but they can't help it. The tension just gets to each of them!!!

It is the end of the day. The attack started at a little past daybreak when Kal would have finished his shift. He's been awake all day and has decided to go to bed at 'night' and return to the day watch ... but it is now evening.

So, the n-fic stuff is coming up soon and I have a question. It is not particularly racy, but I'm not comfortable putting it the g-fic section. I could do a version of the chapters that are g-fic and post both versions, but there might not be that much difference between the two in the end, so I don't really know what to do. Shall I post n-fic only, risk it in the g-fic, or do 2 versions of these chapters?

Thanks

Since other people might be lurking (and not commenting) this story, definitely include a Gfic version of the chapter (since the story started posting on the Gfic side), and have the Nfic as the "bonus". You might want to include an "Author's Note" at the top of that part, stating that there's an Nfic version of that chapter available. Some people just put the Nfic extended scene over on the Nfic side, and not the whole chapter, while others post a whole version of the chapter (including the Nfic scene) on the Nfic side, so that it can be read in context. With "Nightfall Honeymoon" I posted the whole story (like KenJ does with his Matchmaker Chronicles) on both boards, but I had Nfic scenes in more than half of the chapters. I have to say, that is a lot more work. LOL.

If you mention specific body parts or describe in too much detail what's happening, then it definitely needs to be toned down for the Gfic side. Dancing that line was a major dilemma for me when writing "Nightfall Honeymoon" that I had both an Nfic Beta and a Gfic Beta, so the Gfic Beta could tell me if I didn't tone it down enough.

Thanks. I'm going to do 2 versions then, probably posting the full chapter with each.

I'm guessing I also need to do a n-fic TOC.

Thanks again.