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You do realize that now you need a sequel, right?

I second Queen of the Capes. This cries out for a sequel. (Well done, by the way.)

I hope your daughter is all right.

Joy,
Lynn

First of all, I hope your daughter is okay. I'm assuming since you took the time to post that she is. that I'm not the only one who carries around a notebook and pen should inspiration strike when I'm bored.

What a great introspective piece. I can just picture this happening. The conflict. The indecision. Spot on. Plus, the curiosity. Now that she knows, she cannot stop watching him even when she makes the decision to do so, because maybe he'll do something new.

CLARK: Um... that I'm a lunkhead?

CLARK: Me or Superman?

CLARK: She does?

CLARK: She's on to me?

Wouldn't that given her faux sleeping act away?

CLARK: Lois! You sleepwalk?

Awwww.



Uh-oh. He woke up. Now what?

Oh. He's still asleep. What if he wakes up before soon hits?

Very enjoyable.

I, too, would like to know what happens when "soon" happens or if Clark wakes before it.

Brava! I'm just sorry that I didn't have a chance to beta this and enjoy it before anyone else.

Hi!

First, I hope your daughter is okay.

It' really a great story .... and it needs a sequel! Please?

My favorite sentence?

Um, I didn't plan one. This was just a way to pass the time.

She's fine. It was some grit in her eye, from the day before, that seemed to be still there, or maybe had scratched her eye. She was in a bit of distress, but it was all okay in the end. Except for the gel that has to be put in her eye 4 times a day to keep away any infection! It's a real fight to get her to keep still, I can tell you.

Okay. A second mention of a sequel, in only the second reply. Hmmm.

I've had a notebook in my handbag for years...

LOIS: Well, he's asleep. I can get away with staring ... and he's never going to know!

LOIS: Well, yeah, that too.

LOIS: BOTH! Lunkhead!

LOIS: UM.

LOIS: Um, yeah. *nods* That's it. I'm investigating. (Do you think he believed me?)

LOIS: (mumbling) Is this the way to the interrogation room, inspector?



LOIS: Yeah, I'm crying too.

Nope.

I've no idea! What do you think?

Thanks. I really don't know what will happen when "soon" comes. There was no thought of a continuation when I wrote this, just a study in Lois' internal thoughts.

Ahh, so that's the reason you want to beta. You like to see things before everyone else. LOL.

Thanks Sydney. She's fine. And, yeah, it's a good sentence.

Lots of votes for a sequel. I'll have to think about it. I wondered about doing a similar introspective piece from Clark's pov when he's putting the blanket on Lois ... but that wouldn't give you all the answers you are after. I then came up with two possible ideas ... based on the titles - In the Dead of the Night, or In the Light of the Morning. But I'm not feeling either of them at the moment.

Hi

As usual I'm late to the party! So glad your daughter is OK. Grit in the eye can be painful.

I can see Lois sitting in the dark, watching the floating specimen of perfection, wrestling with her decisions. No way is life going to go back to the way it was before that night.

Sequel?

Well, this first one sounds like Clark thinking about revealing his secret to Lois when she's frozen. The second one? No idea. Probably best to let your subconscious play around with the idea of making a sequel and if it happens, it happens (and we'll all be ). If it doesn't, it doesn't. But at least we got this great piece.

I'm glad to hear your daughter is okay. Yeah, grit and goop in the eye aren't fun.

I also am glad everything is working out on the RL front with your daughter.

I really liked the story as far as you took it and of course as it stands we can finish it ourselves the way we would like. Having read it three times now i think you got Lois perfectly. She wants to be mad; she wants to have him (Clark) but is afraid of what that could mean (Superman) and whether she could handle it; she also is in awe that he would latch onto her of all of the people in the world to be his best friend; she loves him (especially the Clark him) but hates what he has done to her. The thing that Clark (and us honestly) loves about Lois is her complexity and her passion both of which are evident in this piece in spades.

I kind of agree with Virginia, a sequel would be nice. On one hand I would prefer one that resolves the mental crisis that Lois is having and on the other hand like the way it is left open. A prequel (Clark's introspective view as you mentioned) would be very interesting from the other side of the coin. But as Virginia said, if it doesn't happen then we have a nice little introspective piece here.

Thanks and great job.

Mike

Well, I totally appreciate the story as what it is--it was an amazing introspection, I really like stories like this--but, because I liked it SO much , can I put a few more votes into having a sequel? (Like 3 or 4 votes--to maybe sway you? ).

I'm just dying to hear what she tells Clark, see how/when she tells Clark, and then to see where they go from there? I loved all the conflicting emotions, all the layers, that you wrote into Lois as she was trying to come to terms with her discovery. Seeing how it would all play out between the two if them would be quite interesting...

BUT, even without a sequel, it was an awesomely, great story--taking place during a huge moment in their relationship/friendship

Thanks for a great read!
Laura

I liked this very much, and it’s perfectly balanced and self-contained.

I do admit I’d also like to see how things go once Clark wakes up. Does Lois tell him what she saw, or does she keep it to herself? So it would be nice to have a sequel.

Definitely not. And Lois realises that.

Hmmm, maybe ...

So ... I did let my subconscious play ... I'm thinking that maybe it was a bad idea!

Exactly ... finish it however you want.

Three times? WOW! I didn't realize anyone would re-read it so many times already.

Yeah. Glad I got all that across in such a short piece.

Yeah it would be... hmmm.

Well, you can't have it both ways, you know. (or maybe you can ... *winks* see what you think)

I considered it, but in the end, you get a tiny look at this in the sequel, rather than they whole thing being about it.

Thanks.

I dare not count up the actual votes for a sequel, especially when I start to include the posting on ksite and fanfiction.net.

Thank you.

That's what I thought. But everyone else seemed to think it needed more. *puts hands on hips and huffs*

Maybe you'll find out.

For all those of you who were after a sequel ...

In the Light of the Morning.

Awwwwwww!!!! How sweet! Happy sigh! So glad she didn't wake him, that she's giving herself time to process the information, understand her own feelings before she confronts him. WAFFY in the best way!

Beautiful and poetic.

Thank you.

Thanks. Have you read the sequel?

Hi Vic!
I’m sorry this took a bit, but umm…/points at work/

Hmm…

Yeah, she so found out he’s Superman.

Fun thought: What if she actually slept with him during PML and is now all antsy about it?

He really didn’t think that one through, did he?

Oh boy.

‘stud’? ‘hunk’? ‘The after. The way, way after.’
TRASK: ‘Specimen’.

He sleeping in the buff?

Oh dear. Did she bang her head in the loo? Is her name now Wanda?

How about punching him in the side?

CLARK: Because I’m a story to her?

So she could have a ‘night cap’ with him?

That would have been fun. Her sneaking after him and slipping under the covers next to him.

Clark and Lois, respectively?





Ten Things I Hate About You?

LOIS: Stupid world. I hate the world!
TEMPUS:



Maybe if she put a ring on his…finger while he’s asleep?

Yeah, that’s going to go over well with Clark.

So great there’s a sequel!

Michael

*hugs* I forgive you.

*nods*

LOL.

Well, he didn't actually design the apartment... he just decorated it.

Sounds about right.

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Sorry, I got lost in a moment then.

Now that would just be tragic. Nope. She's just having 'middle of the night'-'subconscious' rambles ... which are not that very different from 'middle of the day'-'verbal' rambles, come to think of it.

Even sleep deprived and shocked to the core she knows better than to try and punch Superman.

LOIS: No.. Uh no. We needed to finish the story. Yup. Story.

Hmmm. Nice idea.



Pretty sure that Clark has never fantasized about Lois on her knees in front of him ... begging him ... to love her. Na.

Yup. And I see that you already found it.

Yes, but he didn’t offer Lois the big bed they wouldn’t share
CLARK: She was *ASLEEEEEEP*!!!
LOIS: Which I’m not anymore thanks to you screaming like that…





Darnit!


CLARK: I like to stay more in the realistic realm. Like Lois telling me to love Mayson because she’d never go for me. And then I wake up and realize it was all just a bad dream.



Michael