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Part 3 tomorrow. Then you need to tell me if it fulfils the challenge or not.

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Well done with enough medical technical stuff to make it realistic.

I kept waiting (and maybe he will still) for Clark to yell how can you NOT hear the heartbeat. I can hear it plainly. At this moment I expect his secret is more important to Lois than it is to him. I was expecting him to have a more overt wish of his own in this part though. I guess we have to wait until the last part.

Well played ending for the second part in a row.

Mike

Well, I sure had to read this the second I saw it post this afternoon! You've really got me curious, wondering what will happen. Hoping all is fine.

I totally agree with Mike. You have enough 'hospital' info in the story to seem realistic, but also, it doesn't get in the way at all with the story of our characters we love so much. Great balance--really impressive .

Glad that you are posting quickly--wanting to make sure everyone is ok.

Love you writing, KK
Laura

A good middle part. You've done an excellent job of ratcheting up the tension. Thank you for your rapid posting schedule. Any chance of an *early* posting tomorrow?

FWIW, I thought the change in wishes was pretty clearly spelled out in this part.

Joy,
Lynn

Scary! And you have me waiting anxiously for the resolution. I hope everyone’s OK in the end.

More nail biting to come .....

Yea! That they can at least have the reassurance of Clark's super hearing to know that HE hears the heartbeat. Yes, I bet this whole scenario would ruin anyone's Christmas. Poor Lois, Poor Clark! I'm guessing from this line:
... that Lois hasn't let him look at any of their unborn children before. I can understand that. Since pregnant women aren't supposed to be x-rayed and his vision is known as "x-ray" vision although, I really doubt he uses any type of radiation to do it.

Very scarey. I hoping they have a good resolution, even if it has to happen AFTER Christmas to fulfill the criteria of the challenge.

Thanks.

LOL. I can just imagine it too, although I think it would fit in more of a comedy skit version of the story.

He did think about wishes and kind of mentioned what his wish is.

Thanks again.

You'll fine out soon.

Thanks. Sometimes too much factual information can get in the way of the story, but if you put none in at all then the story seems to superficial.

Thank you very much.

Oh my. And what did you diagnose?

Thanks.

It's coming now. Is that okay?

Thanks.

So do I. Oh, um, I'm supposed to know, I'm the one that wrote it! Oops.

Tee Hee.

I bet Clark will not stop listening to that heartbeat for even one second now.

Good logic and you are probably right.

Part three will give you all the answers. And then we find out if it does fulfil the criteria!