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Inquiring Minds want to know!

Has this story come to a logical end or is it not quite there yet? My very patient beta reader, Christina, says it was not. She thinks there are some dangling strings that need knotting in a Part 4 (although, she believe my first draft Part 4 could use more work). Do you agree that I should fix those danglers now, or should I just leave the door slightly open (and end it for now), and therefore have a possible sequel sometime in the future? Let me know.

I read this last night, but it was so late/early in the morning that I just decided to go to bed after reading and didn't have time to post any comments until now.

That's what got me into trouble with my Chuck fic and how my 4,000 word story turned into a 30,000 word story. I let the readers decide.

I would be fine with whatever you decided. It could end here and I would be satisfied, but having more story to read would be fun too.

Whichever way you choose to go I've enjoyed this story. It's been a fun read.

I enjoyed the story (I always like Ultra Woman stories!), and I think Christina is right: you could continue it if you want to.

- How do they get the Red K back?
- Will the Newtrich Sisters knowing Lois is UW compromise Lois and Clark?
- How does Lois take to superhero-hood? Does she keep her powers permanently, or lose them like Jesse Stepanovich?

Inquiring minds want to know!

Hmmm....wow, Virginia, I could really go either way on this . I really liked this part, and getting to the ending, I can see this being the ending. I don't feel like the story got 'cut off' or anything.

But...there are things that would be fun to exlore . Hence...your options. #1--leave as is, and have a sequel down the road. #2.--part 4.

I'd like to see how everything with the Red K and the Newtrich sisters is resolved. I'd love to know if Lois keeps her powers and how she/they adjust to this, or if she doesn't, how does everything get back to 'normal'. And--knowing me --I'd love anything that progresses them towards the alter, a WAFFY moment here or there as you wrap the storyline up.

But, I guess, really, you could accomplish any of this by doing either #1 or #2. I guess...final verdict...is basing my suggestion on where you are with the story at the moment. If you think you want more added to the story--and feel inspired now, maybe just go for it--part 4 . Or...if you want to give it some time, think more about it, give us a sequel as a lovely surprise down the road a bit . ( Or--last option--maybe leave as is? It does, like I mentioned, feel good the way it is, also, IMO).

Any way you go about it, I'm totally . It was a really fun story, loved it, and have completely enjoyed it.


For the briefest of moments when I read this part, I wondered if Clark could have his powers back. I mean, he did get all the way down to the ground alive. But...I knew that Lois had her powers, and never thought that they'd both potentially have powers at the same time, so I figured I must be wrong .


Had a bit of a 'moment' here reading this paragraph. It always obviously bugged me that Clark broke up with Lois 'for her own good' in Contact--it seemed like such a sudden reality check he had. BUT, I don't know if I ever thought about why it annoyed me so much, and seemed so sudden. This reasoning is amazing! It makes no sense that from a concussion he would freak out so much, but from freezing Lois a few eps back--and her almost not coming out of it--he'd move right on past it and propose. Great point, Virginia--the concussion reaction is quite, quite 'off'. Loved this! .


True . Liked this a lot .


This part was awesome. I really enjoyed 'Clark Babble' . And the teasing was a lot of fun, too .

Great work, Virginia--will be curious to know what you end up deciding to do with the story...
Laura

There are certainly some unanswered questions that you could explore in another part or a sequel. Ultrawoman was a way for Lois to use Superman's powers while Clark didn't have them. But now they both have powers, so Lois doesn't need to use hers. She doesn't have Clark's temperament - can't handle using them in the same way he can. So even though she has the powers, what if she made a conscious choice not to use them? Let Clark go back to being Superman and retire Ultrawoman. Would she be able to cut herself off completely, or would she only use them for selfish purposes like aiding her investigations? Would Clark resent Lois for having powers but not using them to help others? Of course, those ideas would move your story away from romantic comedy and towards drama and conflict, so you should probably just ignore me!

Susan, who thinks that the karaoke bar has small Ultrawoman shrine off in the corner, as the patrons wait patiently for her return

Comments!

Lady Loisette: Thanks for coming back to comment.

This is the first time I've done that. My stories have no problem becoming long, because I usually let the characters decide what they should do. (I know, stupid, right? /shakes head/ They *never* want their story to end. They're always rambling on in their minds about this and that or whatnot.) It's why my 11th file of Wrong Clark (do you really even want to know this?), which only covers parts 184-206 (roughly) is 95K words and will probably be over 100K before I start my 12th file. (300-350 pages of double spaced story per file is long enough, don't you think?) Nah. You didn't want to know that. Congratulations on getting to 30K. Once you get that far in, it's the stopping that gets hard. By then, it's become an addiction. You love these characters and you don't want to leave them to go work on something else. I completely understand. Hmmmm. /Considers new self-help group: Over-Writers Anonymous. /

I haven't made any firm decision yet. This week, between filing taxes, sick kids, Superbowl, catching cold of sick kids, and starting my new job, writing has been allotted to between 10pm-11pm at night, if that. I'm really behind.

Thanks.

DebbieG: Debbie!!! Hi!

Thank you. Yes, I find that Betas are usually right, even if you don't always want to hear what they say when they say it. /Many thanks to Lynn S.M. and Wendy, my other betas, who had the guts to tell me that Part 3 -- the first draft -- didn't work. AT ALL./

Basically, you hit Christina's points exactly on why Part 3 didn't feel like "The End" to her. Thanks for your advice.

Laura: Thanks for coming back to tell me what you thought of Part 3. I didn't think my question would stump so many people.

Thank you. /the part of me that has been struggling with this story since writing part one and always feeling there was more to be said thanks you./

Yep, there's lies my dilemma. My main problem is that I haven't dealt with the Newtrich sisters at all, so stopping here and then writing another story which finishes within this same episode feels wrong. I would definitely keep that plot part within the arc of this story.

You state my inner conflict so well here.

Well, I'll have to see where inspiration strikes. /eyes thundercloud ominously./

Thank you.

That's what's so great about the lightning strike. Clark doesn't know good ol' William Wallace Walldecker got his powers, because he still had his. But in UW, he KNEW right away something wasn't right.

Tell me about!

Thank you. I always thought it weird he jumped to proposing after freezing Lois, too. But it was a very romantic proposal with the fountain, rain, and him promising to make it through his whole speech /sigh/ I can't fault them for taking it there just for the sake of season finale cliffy.

I've been watching a lot of Young Justice lately (come on, Netflix, where's S2?!) and Superman gets knocked this way and that, all the time. Sometimes, grunting as if something hurts. So, I figured, with all things equal...

Thank you. /cup overflowith/ The only thing that makes Clark nervous is Lois and now they're equal. That's got to be a big deal in so many ways, as it knocks out a bunch of his previous concerns.

Thanks. Me, too.

groobie: Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts.

Interesting concept. It's why I've always wondered if Clark's kids (fully powered) would follow in his footsteps. Would they feel obligated to just because they have these power, even if they didn't actually *want* to? I'm sure some of them might. If so, how would they rebel against said feeling of obligation? I doubt that Clark would ever force his kids to make the life choices he did, but they probably still think he'd want them to... whether they wanted to or not, they just might just to please their dad.

Oh, she'd totally use them. Even Clark does.

Would he? I can't see Clark resenting anyone (save maybe Dan).

This was a romantic comedy? Uh... yes, I guess, I did move it in that direction. What? Ignore your wonderful advice? Never! Follow it? /shrugs/ We'll have to see what the fates have in store for this story's future.

No comment.

I've never let anyone else decide what happens with my story before my last one. So it was a new experience letting outside sources have some control over my story. Characters who want to do their own thing is how I ended up with a still unfinished 153,000 word sequel to a 20,000 word story. When/if I can ever finish it, I have an unlimited supply of one-shots to write for that universe.

Hmmmm. Perhaps we need to rename our self-help group to "Those in a Relationship with a Domineering Muse" instead? LOL.

Wouldn’t it be awkward if the lightning bolt had liquefied him and that puddle was all that remained?

So…?





To be fair, that was the smart thing to do, not going against her wishes.

Maybe he should tread carefully, now?



LEX: Working on it!

Transgressions?



Living dangerous, aren’t we?

So, she can now slap him when he flirts with blondes and it will hurt?

Hmm…maybe the dirty talk without the dirt?

‘are’ missing?

He quite unsure how to proposition his fiancée, isn’t he?







Oh? Do they actually do Bachelorette auctions?

She’s a new chess computer?

Stay the night?







MARTHA:

So, she was in plain sight?



TEMPUS: “And it leads directly to our honeymoon.”
LOIS:



Michael

Darth Michael; Let's see if I can sneak in another reply before tomorrow.

CLARK: Awkward?

It's at time like those that one really could use the friendship of a genius (or world's greatest detective).

Where's the fun in that?

LOIS: Oh, die already, will ya?!
CLARK: Lois!
LOIS: What? Lex always thinks everything is about him.

What? Two flying superheroes? Or misleading Lois?

CLARK: /points at his chest/ It always hurt, right there.

Clean talk?

Ooops. I'll try to remember to fix that bit if my GE doesn't catch it.

He doesn't have much practice.

Isn't that how that Celtic guy bought Lois?

Well, she was captain of her chess club.

(Actually, I don't think so, which is why Lois teases him about it.)

CLARK: On Krypton.
MARTHA: Never mind.

For some.

What does Tempus have to do with L&C's honeymoon? Oh, right. Herb-interruptus.

Isn’t that what you say when something unfortunate happens?
CLARK: Unfortunate?

Like one of those birdmen?

To be had later, when she *doesn’t* dump him?

Also, now that she…well…considering the outcome…won’t Lex be quite surpised?

Floating sans suit.

LOIS: /punches him, right there/
CLARK: Oooowwwwww!
LOIS: You were right.

He did? Huh. So, would those be classified very progressive or very sexist?

LOIS: Thanks. Thanks a lot…



Michael