Susan! What a place to leave us hanging!
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I loved Virginia's original story, I loved your n-fic continuation, and I'm really excited to read the rest of this version (soon though, I hope
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Hmmm--I guess there's always a trip into the n-fic folder...find your original attempt...read that till you post again? Kidding
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Seriously though, this story is really great. Better than great. I remember FDKing previously how I was impressed by the wording. The style is amazing. How you use certain words, play with them, give them extra meaning. It's so creative...mutliple times just now, I'd read a sentence or paragraph, think 'oh-wow...' and have to reread totally just for how you put a certain sentence or sentences together. It has a very enjoyable effect.
Because he’s not just my partner anymore. I think he’s my partner – a more fully realized version of the word. And it happened when I kissed him ten minutes ago, or he kissed me, or we kissed each other – the memory flows together as if it’s been an infinite embrace without beginning, middle, or end. But it was both an end and a beginning, and yet really just the continuation of our partnership, the undercurrent of our partnership. The part of our partnership that was the foundation of our partnership. How could I have failed to realize that “Lane and Kent” worked because of Lois and Clark? That part of me merged with him the first time I edited his copy?
LOVE this paragraph. Immensely. The twists and turns are so much like how someone thinks. It's very real. It so much shows someone discovering love. Realizing what they have in front of them.
And one of the best lines, IMO, to sum up the magic of their relationship: 'How could I have failed to realize that "Lane and Kent" worked because of Lois and Clark?'. Perfection
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I can’t pinpoint when that irritation had ceased to be an annoyance and had morphed into a curiosity. Probably when I realized that even when he’s gone, he’s still there. That his presence fills my world, even when he’s not present. That he’s in my heart and my soul – he always has been and he always will. When I kiss him and find my missing piece, I can’t take it back because its space is filled with the part of Clark that I’ve stolen from him.
And I know I stole it. He didn’t give it away – I took it along with his breath the first day we met. I doubt he knows that I saw the look that shocked his face when he first laid eyes on me because I made sure he knew I wasn’t interested in it. But I had lifted the hack from Nowheresville’s heart like a pickpocket – easily and confidently.
I catch a glimpse of myself in a mirror and grimace at my lack of confidence. That I could convince myself he preferred blondes, or strangers on the street, or lawyers in a courtroom. Because I know that he prefers me. I know that he always has. I know that he always will. But it’s easier to deny that knowledge – push it away forcefully with drama and tests. Push him away before he pulls.
I love the honesty that Lois has with herself here. And done in first person, with such feeling, it has a ton of intensity. It works very well.
The awareness of Clark--how he consumes her world. How Lois is completely aware of the effect she had on Clark at the beginning
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Cocky smiles, cheeky remarks – constantly directed at me but carefully hidden from everyone else.
And it makes me feel special, worthy of being teased and taunted, mocked and rebuked. That for me, he lowers his shield and reveals the less polite, less deferent, less perfect man he really is. He’s done it since we became partners, and now that we’re more fully realized partners, maybe he’ll do it more. Maybe he’ll be worthy of me by matching me flaw for flaw.
And this part. Showing that bit of yourself you never show
anyone else. Lois knowing that he's only that way with her. Letting down barriers.
There is something amazingly romantic and exciting about being completely yourself with someone. And the biggie--knowing they are being that way only with you
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Really excited to enjoy this story again, in another format. Completely loving it...
Laura
