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Okay, so I know I said I'd post this tomorrow, but tomorrow is our last day in our old house and I have a massive to-do list. If I didn't post this now, I'd have to wait until after we move.

This chapter is also longer

Feli.

Delightful,
I loved the restraint Lois showed and the break up. Very nicely done.

Referring to my previous post, I have to say you crafted a graceful exit for poor Dan here: I like the way he nails Lois while she's trying to muddling the waters... A real cop!

And she's off! Yea! Next week's post should be a good one.

I like how Lois worked through her thoughts and feelings to discover how she actually felt / feels about Clark. I'm glad she had the forethought to understand that Clark might actually be off the market.

With the way Lois was feeling it really would've been shocking if Dan hadn't realized that Lois didn't feel for him what he did for her. It sure made it easier for her to have him dump her first. Although, bringing up Clark constantly for their whole conversation was a red flag most intelligent men would notice, especially since Clark was an ex-boyfriend.

Good luck on your move!

I just found this story and I have to say, I'm liking it very much. I feel sorry for the holes in both left in Lois and Clark. And the break up, I can only picture the resignation Dan felt when the penny finally dropped. I'm eagerly awaiting the next part. Sarah

I too just started reading this story and I'm enjoying it. I like how you've given us insight regarding Lois' feelings about Dan and her gradual realization that she loves Clark.

Joan

In haste as it's moving day...

Framework4- Thanks! I originally wrote the breakup much more acrimoniously but it really made Dan out to be the bad guy. And he's not- just the wrong guy.

HiddenMoon- See, I was at least somewhat nice to Dan... it could've been worse

VirginiaR- Yup, after three years of (apparently) unrequited love it's not inconceivable that he'd try and move on. (Plus- if Clark came on the market, who wouldn't try to snap him up? )

Sarah- Thank you! It's easy to get wrapped up in Clark's pain in the whole Scardino arc of season 2, but I always thought Lois would've been extremely hurt that Clark was just going to take off without talking to her- something that was glossed over in the series (I'm assuming due to lack of time). I'm just kind of extrapolating it.

ScifiJoan- Thanks! Lois really isn't in touch with her feelings (or good feelings anyway). At least she realises in time. I originally started the story with her and Dan married, but it was so... messy.

Thanks to everyone that's commented so far

Now I really must go start loading the moving van...

Feli

Dan's not my favorite character from the show, but he's not a bad guy. You gracefully found a way out of their relationship that preserves his dignity and respect. I like that he's the one who called it off - that he saw he wasn't being loved the way he should be, and that he stood up for himself. Good luck with the move.

Go Lois ! Go Lois ! Go Lois ! Go find CLARK! Woo-hoo!

I am loving this, Feli. This was a great chapter--you could really gather the reality that Lois was awakening to. Clark is her best friend ('is', not 'was' ), she loves him, she wants to be with him, and, currently, she has no business being engaged to Dan.

The date with Dan was written really well. The conversation was needed, along with the honesty. I really like how the situation was handled.

Can not wait for the next part...and--oh, look, it's posted !
Laura

Good luck with all that moving! Hope everything is going smoothly for you guys.

Poor Dan! My heart goes out to him in a big way. It is a painful thing to realize that the woman you love only cares about you and is hopelessly in love with someone else. He did the right thing: taking his ring back and walking out. Perhaps when he gets back to DC he can find a beautiful woman who truly cares and loves him.