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This story is finally seeing the light of day. This is by far the longest story I have ever written and guess what? It is not finished!  But as Harry Stamper (from the film Armageddon) once said: "I have never failed to hit the mark and I am not going to fail now." I hope readers both old and new drop by to read it and maybe leave a line of comment. Let's stay on this road and see what alt Lois and Clark are up to.
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This was not the story I was expecting! How wonderful that you are going to post this now. This chapter complete with a bunch of flashbacks provide a nice base to tell the story. Nicely done!
Mike
Create all the happiness you are able to create.
Remove all the misery you are able to remove.
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You have me hooked, Morgana    ! I have always wanted/hoped/wished for Alt. Clark to find his Lois. To fall in love. To not be so lonely. And to have a better life--when he's always had so much stacked against him...loosing his parents, his privacy, and the biggie, his Lois. I love how you've set this up, and I'm really excited to see where things go. What happens when this Lois and Clark meet? Does Alt. Clark remember all of this happening with Herb (his time with the other Lois and Clark/events in the Prologue) or is meeting Lois a totally new experience for him? I really enjoyed all the details you added into this story so far...everything that makes this universe different from the one we are used to. Great job  Laura
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"Where's Clark?" "Right here."
...two simple sentences--with so much meaning.
~Lois and Clark in 'House of Luthor'~
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MikeMThis was not the story I was expecting! How wonderful that you are going to post this now. This chapter complete with a bunch of flashbacks provide a nice base to tell the story. Nicely done! Thank you! Nearly four years in the making it should have should have enough twists and turns in the plot to please everyone. No worries, the other story shall make it debut very soon. 
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LMAI love how you've set this up, and I'm really excited to see where things go. What happens when this Lois and Clark meet? Does Alt. Clark remember all of this happening with Herb (his time with the other Lois and Clark/events in the Prologue) or is meeting Lois a totally new experience for him?
I really enjoyed all the details you added into this story so far...everything that makes this universe different from the one we are used to. Thanks so much for the happy comment, it really made my day! Alt Clark is going to meet up with Lois and he's going to have quite a time working with Mad Dog Lane until ... Nyahh! I don't want to give away the plot. Rest assured since this is an AU there will be big differences and small ones. Just enough to let you know we are not in the Metropolis we know and love. 
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Great set up! I love Alt-Clark stories. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story, and hope Clark gets his Lois in the end. 
You can find my stories as Groobie on the nfic archives and Susan Young on the gfic archives. In other words, you know me as Groobie. 
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GoobieSo glad you like it! Poor Alt-Clark really did get the short end of the stick. Hopefully this story will be to everyone's liking. Looking forward to reading your comments. Oh yes, posting on Mondays and Fridays.
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So, Lois has been saved from the Congo. I'm wondering, though -- if she caught a flight with the Luthors and left them in Rome, did they have anything to do with her disappearance?
"Oh, you can’t help that," said the Cat: "we’re all mad here. I’m mad. You’re mad."
"How do you know I’m mad?" said Alice.
"You must be," said the Cat, "or you wouldn’t have come here.”
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AnnieBGreetings!  So glad to hear from you! So, Lois has been saved from the Congo. I'm wondering, though -- if she caught a flight with the Luthors and left them in Rome, did they have anything to do with her disappearance? Ah, now pesky little details like that will all be explained in the following chapters. The Luthors play a part in this story, but not what you or anyone else might be thinking. Patience.
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Great! An Alt-Clark and Alt-Lois story! I love these stories, since the show left Alt-Clark's life so lonely and sad. Love the set-up.
Cuidadora
"Honey, we didn't care if you were a Russian or a Martian... You were ours... and we weren't giving you to anybody." ~ Martha in Strange Visitor
"A love that risks nothing is worth nothing." ~ Jonathan in Big Girls Don't Fly
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That's exactly why I tackled this project! Poor Alt-Clark was left high and dry. I believe if the series had been allowed another season, his problems might have been solved. As it is, we are left with only our attempts at making him happy.
Hopefully this story will make you happy as well!
Thanks for the comment!
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“Mr. and Mrs. Luthor! Please look this way!” One of the swarm shouted. “Is it true you are donating part of the proceeds from the sale of your magnificent Picasso and Degas collection to help the homeless children of Metropolis?” Mrs. Luthor? As in Arianna Carlin Luthor? This should be interesting... “Lois, this is an impressive piece of investigative journalism. Still it was a wise move to come to the Legal Department before sending it over to Perry. An article of such caliber usually triggers a tidal wave reaction, one of global significance.” Constance Hunter neatly replaced the papers and computer diskette into a blue folder, leaned back in her chair and took a contemplative pose. <How do I impress upon this young firebrand what kind of man Daae is without dampening her enthusiasm *or* scaring her witless?> Wait, what? Constance Hunter is in the DP Legal Department? That's a new twist... “That is *my* story. Claude *stole* it.” Lois spoke, her voice carrying loud and clear across the bullpen. Go Lois! Stand up for yourself. “Oh, Perry, please forgive my memory lapse. Lois *did* assist with a little research, just as before during the college bribery scandal. There is more than enough material for her to contribute a sidebar or two.” What a snake! When word reached Jack Bartholomew in his tiny researcher’s cubicle, he immediately made his way to the elevator. <Since Constance Hunter is supposed to have seen this story of Miss Lane’s I better let her know what’s goin’ down.> Ha ha! Go Jack! Lois handed the diskette back to Constance and said, “I clearly remember having only one diskette and I tucked that into my desk drawer along with everything else.”
“Oh, this?” Constance grinned, as she put the diskette in her pocket and patted it securely. “It’s the spreadsheet for the Legal Department’s vacation schedule!”
Perry shook his head fighting to keep a grin from spreading across his face, “So much for Claude thinking less of you.” Gotta love it when girls band together against a worm like Claude. She was infuriated, yet despite her anger, she noticed a very handsome man sporting circular wire rim glasses, dark hair, wearing light gray pants and a dark gray shirt walking towards the elderly gentleman who had given her the newspaper. For some reason he gazed at her with a curiously joyful expression on his face.
Lois tried to ignore the man. He looks like he just fell off a turnip truck, Mr. Greenjeans, no matter how gorgeous he is didn’t matter and I’ve got bigger problems. Uh-huh... “Entirely possible. You see, she never boarded the Zurich Air flight. According to my records she departed with the Luthors who were on their way to Italy, they dropped her off in Rome and from there she caught a flight to Kinshasa and that is the last anyone heard of her.”
“Thank goodness! Maybe it was you giving her the newspaper which slowed her up long enough to get that phone call.” The younger man said.
“Precisely. Now she can move forward with her life and you will meet her under entirely different circumstances. This is a great victory, one to be savored Clark. For this is the time pivot which forced your life on a different trajectory, now we need to return you to two years prior to Tempus’ appearance in Metropolis so we can fix this wretched situation he threw you into.”
“Herb, do you really think it’s possible? What about my past self? We will exist at the same time.”
The little man bounced on his toes, apparently wanting to say something, but was reluctant to do so. “No. That will not happen. Please, please trust me; everything will be taken care of, all in due time.”
Clark whispered softly, almost reverently, “*My* Lois and I will have a life … together.”
“Exactly! My boy, both of you will enjoy many adventures together and will be very happy…”
“But I won’t have a secret identity. How could an intensely private woman like Lois Lane deal with the paparazzi? You saw how that crowd of photographers chased Luthor and his wife.”
“Clark, let me assure you, Lois in this or any universe can handle those ruffians quite easily. Remember this is Lois of five years ago. Currently, she is a relatively unpolished gem who has not won her first Kerth award. But by the time Tempus shows up, she *and* her counterpart will find a way to not only get you into the suit, but prevent your secret from being discovered.” And thus the adventure begins....
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Constance Hunter neatly replaced the papers and computer diskette into a blue folder, leaned back in her chair and took a contemplative pose. <How do I impress upon this young firebrand what kind of man Daae is without dampening her enthusiasm *or* scaring her witless?>
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“That is *my* story. Claude *stole* it.” Lois spoke, her voice carrying loud and clear across the bullpen.
Go Lois! Stand up for yourself. Constance Hunter will offer legal help later in the story. Whenever possible I tried to use characters that are a part of the LnC universe, yet in a slightly different way. In the pilot, Lois never seemed to make an effort to right that particular wrong that Claude commented against her. This is my take on matters.
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Nice beginning, I like how you handled Claude.
I wonder how Linda beat Lois with the story in the Congo, did HG Wells have something to do with it?
Now off to part one.
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Kathryn84Nice beginning, I like how you handled Claude.
I wonder how Linda beat Lois with the story in the Congo, did HG Wells have something to do with it?
Now off to part one. Squeel! How cool is it to get new comments nearly a year after this was posted? Claude needed to be handled. After what he did to Lois, it was only what he deserved. Cheats like that shouldn't be allowed to work for a decent newspaper. Linda's part in the story shall be explained. Hope the explanation and the story meet up with your expectations!
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