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Okay, we've won the big game, but there was a problem created.
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Herb replied, “My boy, I never say … impossible.” "Lois and Clarks" My stories can be found herekj
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When you had JJ make the sack, I thought oops. Sure enough plans derailed just a bit with JJ as the MVP. As I suspected they came up with a plan, but how will Hattie and Morgana react to being picked up by Jon and JJ instead of JJ and Jon? You did not have them clue the girls in on the change of plans.
One side note, when JJ tackled the player in the end zone it is not a touchback but a safety which generated the 2 points and the penalized team having to kick the ball back even after giving up the two points...
Nice chapter.
Mike
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To be chosen as Homecoming Queen is an honor, to be escorted by JJ is fine, but it should have been Jon. So glad for the change off. Yippee!
The game was very well written and exciting! It brought back memories of High School games I attended; I could smell the grass and taste the hot chocolate!
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Hi Mike, Thanks for the FDK! When you had JJ make the sack, I thought oops. Sure enough plans derailed just a bit with JJ as the MVP. As I suspected they came up with a plan, but how will Hattie and Morgana react to being picked up by Jon and JJ instead of JJ and Jon? You did not have them clue the girls in on the change of plans.
One side note, when JJ tackled the player in the end zone it is not a touchback but a safety which generated the 2 points and the penalized team having to kick the ball back even after giving up the two points...
Nice chapter.
Mike Thanks Mike, I have corrected that mistake. I guess it has been too long since I have been able to sit and watch a game. The mix-up with the MVP won’t have lasting repercussions.
Herb replied, “My boy, I never say … impossible.” "Lois and Clarks" My stories can be found herekj
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Hi Morgana, Thanks for the FDk! To be chosen as Homecoming Queen is an honor, to be escorted by JJ is fine, but it should have been Jon. So glad for the change off. Yippee!
The game was very well written and exciting! It brought back memories of High School games I attended; I could smell the grass and taste the hot chocolate! I thought it was time for a little fun and also for throwing a monkey wrench into the works.
Herb replied, “My boy, I never say … impossible.” "Lois and Clarks" My stories can be found herekj
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