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I think Clark has some 'splainin' to do. I wish I could be a fly on the wall to observe Lois's reaction.

Thanks for obliging with this installment; I'm already looking forward to the next one.

Joy,
Lynn

That was fast

Evil... too. Leaving us there

I loved the teaser especially the cliffhanger, but of course I love most of your cliffhangers. One question, I got the impression from 'Expected Twist' that Clark got the kids when they were very young and in this part of the story they are old enough to walk/run. I was surprised that they would have recognized Lois as I envisioned them being infants when Wells brought them to Clark especially when he mentioned that they were so young. Just surprised me thats all.

Mike

I figure if the elder child was about 3 or 4, then she'd be just old enough to remember Mommy but young enough to not understand the finer points of time-travel and alternate-universe counterparts.

So Clark just got 'custody' of the kids recently? That would explain how she understood 'Mommy'. I just envisioned Clark gaining custody when they were smaller.

Thanks

Mike

Oh, this is excellent. I loved the part about Clark, Cat, and the HR department. If I'd been drinking something, it would have been spit out. Luckily I've learned not to consume things when reading your stuff.

I know that Lois will figure out that Clark is Superman, but like others I'd love to see that actually happen. And then she'll realize that her counterpart - their late bio mom - was married to Clark's analog. So what does she think Clark will expect her to do now? Marry him? Move in with him? Start a relationship or watch him move away from Metropolis? Talk about pressure.

And how will she handle knowing The Secret? How will Clark handle her knowing? When will the little girl scream "MOMMY!" or "DADDY!" at the top of her voice in the middle of the newsroom? How will they handle their coworkers knowing about the kids, and how will they explain the unmistakable resemblance to both Lois and Clark?

I still want to know what happened to the kids' parents and whether that threat (assuming it wasn't an accident) will come for a visit.

This is nowhere near finished. Keep them coming!

Part Two is now up. I expanded the teaser into a two-parter, and I'm going to have further installments just be shorts in the series. Many thanks to everyone who commented and kept my muse motivated, and the FoLCs in Google Hangouts who helped me brainstorm!

This is a really interesting story. I like how Clark didn't demand anything of Lois, and I like how Lois came up with a compromise way to relate to the daughter without grudgingly taking on the role of her mother and without breaking the little girl's heart. I'm wondering, though, about what Lois told her at the end about helping Clark take care of her while her mother is gone. I'd be really reluctant to say anything to a child about their late parent without finding out how the death was explained to the kid. She makes it sound like the girl's mom is coming back, but she's not.

MrsMxyzptlk, thanks for commenting!

You bring up a good point about Lois implying the mother could come back. I'm not sure whether or how to address that issue later on; maybe it'll lead to drama, maybe it'll get swept under the rug off-screen.

I kind of assumed that it would get swept under the rug because working it into the story would be overly heart-wrenching.

Lois claiming to be the girl's aunt is a good deflection. It explains why she looks like her mother and lets her interact with the girl and be a family friend without the pressure of parental responsibility. When the kids are older and can understand the whole interdimensional travel thing, then Lois and Clark can explain why "Aunt Lolo" looks just like Mom.

The whole thing makes me wonder, though, whether the girl was told or understands that Clark is not the same Daddy she had before. Given her reaction to Lois, I expect that even if she was told that her parents died and that Clark is a "copy" of Daddy, she doesn't actually understand all that. It's a lot to dump on a 4-year-old. (Er, somehow I assumed she was 4, but going back and looking, you don't actually give an age. Meh, it's a lot for anyone, even if she's 2 or 3 or 5.)

And who better than Clark to take in kids who are not originally his and then accept that they're really his children? He of all people knows that a kid doesn't have to be born to their parents to be their kid.

Yeah, ages are one of my weak points in writing, though I've been trying to get better at it. I figure about 4, give or take a year: old enough to still remember her Mommy after at least several months, young enough to be unable to fully understand.

Aaaand here we go again…
I know that’s late in the game, but I just realized that Clark also has kids. I wonder if that will be enough for Lois to connect the dots.

Oops!

She knows! Or is that the first she hears of it but doesn’t care enough about his private life to wonder about his single-dadded-ness.

/flashes to the babysitter scene from The Incredibles/



Clark probably was confused the entire time why that was a *very* inappropriate thing to offer to an adult instead of…say…a 16-y/o.

Good in case Lois ever happens to find herself in that sort of way after a too long date with Superman?

Just yesterday? Oh my!

Up until now, they’ve dieted on sunlight and apples.

I totally forgot from the last part. They might kind of grow attached.

Foul! Foul!

Should be awkward. Kids tend to wake up sometimes and wander around in search of water.





Umm…Lana was also coloring her hair brunette and had it cut in a page cut style?

Yeah, she’s soooo not going to make that connection.



Michael