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Ah yes, history has been made. Lane and Kent are officially together as partners. 
Battle On,
Deadly Chakram
"Being with you is stronger than me alone." ~ Clark Kent
"One little spark of inspiration is at the heart of all creation." ~ Figment the Dragon
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I love the changes you made to the scene at the end. Flows so much better. Perry's comments at the end really tied it all together nicely.    Great job!
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I love the changes you made to the scene at the end. Flows so much better. Perry's comments at the end really tied it all together nicely. Great job! Thanks! Yeah, I had to agree with your suggestions and cut it down a bit. It really wasn't needed and it flows better now. At least Lane and Kent are a permanent team now.
Battle On,
Deadly Chakram
"Being with you is stronger than me alone." ~ Clark Kent
"One little spark of inspiration is at the heart of all creation." ~ Figment the Dragon
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Love how you changed the scenes up. I still want to try that authentic Chinese food. Does he deliver? I can't wait to see what else you change.
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Love how you changed the scenes up. I still want to try that authentic Chinese food. Does he deliver? I can't wait to see what else you change. Thanks! I wish he would deliver! I could go for some really good Chinese food right about now! Lots more to come!
Battle On,
Deadly Chakram
"Being with you is stronger than me alone." ~ Clark Kent
"One little spark of inspiration is at the heart of all creation." ~ Figment the Dragon
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Finally got caught up.
Now that Clark has introduced Lois to his favorite Chinese place he's going to have to fly back to China whenever she wants Chinese food.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
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Finally got caught up.
Now that Clark has introduced Lois to his favorite Chinese place he's going to have to fly back to China whenever she wants Chinese food.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Haha, yep, I'm sure he'll be making many more trips there in the future! Lucky thing he doesn't mind. 
Battle On,
Deadly Chakram
"Being with you is stronger than me alone." ~ Clark Kent
"One little spark of inspiration is at the heart of all creation." ~ Figment the Dragon
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Sorry, been slack on FDK
Yay for partners! And boy that Gary Wilder is a real piece of work. Glad he's behind bars.
"It means never having to play it cool about how much you like something. It's basically a license to proudly emote on a somewhat childish level rather than behave like a supposed adult. Being a geek is extremely liberating."- Simon Pegg
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Oops! Out of order feedback!  They'd broken the true story of what had happened at the Majestic Theater. Gary Wilder had been arrested and was awaiting trial for conspiring to kill his step-daughter, Tiffany Bronson. He'd hired Vincent Jonas to ensure that the building came down while Tiffany was inside, if, indeed, she decided to pay her last respects to the aging theater. When the job had been botched and Tiffany had miraculously survived the attempt on her life, Gary had stormed his way over to Vincent's apartment. After a brief, but loud, struggle, Gary had overpowered the wiry young man and killed him in his rage. You were right, there was a lot more to Tiffany than meets the eye! It is a pity Gary gambled away her college funds. Maybe Clark could ask Bruce to arrange for a scholarship?
Morgana
A writer's job is to think of new plots and create characters who stay with you long after the final page has been read. If that mission is accomplished than we have done what we set out to do, which is to entertain and hopefully educate.
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Oops! Out of order feedback! They'd broken the true story of what had happened at the Majestic Theater. Gary Wilder had been arrested and was awaiting trial for conspiring to kill his step-daughter, Tiffany Bronson. He'd hired Vincent Jonas to ensure that the building came down while Tiffany was inside, if, indeed, she decided to pay her last respects to the aging theater. When the job had been botched and Tiffany had miraculously survived the attempt on her life, Gary had stormed his way over to Vincent's apartment. After a brief, but loud, struggle, Gary had overpowered the wiry young man and killed him in his rage. You were right, there was a lot more to Tiffany than meets the eye! It is a pity Gary gambled away her college funds. Maybe Clark could ask Bruce to arrange for a scholarship? Haha, feedback is all good, no matter if it's in order or not!  I'm sure Clark did some good for her (off page of course). Otherwise the guilt would get to him. Thanks for reading!
Battle On,
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"Being with you is stronger than me alone." ~ Clark Kent
"One little spark of inspiration is at the heart of all creation." ~ Figment the Dragon
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So now Clark works at the planet, is partnered with Lois and already head over heels in love with her, so far so good but there are still so many things that can go wrong.
At least Gary can't harm Tiffany any more.
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