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I've had this story sitting around for a few months now, and I finally got back to it today to polish it up. I wrote it in a fit of pique after reading yet another story where Lois blows up at Clark when he tells her that he's Superman, only for Clark to bow and scrape to get back into her good graces.

I understand why Lois would get mad about it, but I don't think that Clark should be a doormat when she does. So I wrote a reveal scene with a crazy-angry Lois where Clark retorts the way I always want him to.


"It is a remarkable dichotomy. In many ways, Clark is the most human of us all. Then...he shoots fire from the skies, and it is difficult not to think of him as a god. And how fortunate we all are that it does not occur to him." -Batman (in Superman/Batman #3 by Jeph Loeb)
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I like Clark standing up for himself. Nice job!

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He raised an eyebrow. "Perks?"

She smiled. "A moonlight flight around the city?"

He smiled back. "Lois, as long as you don't flip out at me again for being Superman, I'll fly you wherever you want."

clap Nicely done! Thanks for the fun reveal!


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Awesome story. How I wish it had gone down on the show. An honest, strong, and straightforward Clark :3
Thanks for sharing

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Originally Posted by mrsMxyzptlk
"No, you listen, Clark! I think I deserve better than this from you!"

"You deserve... ?! This isn't about you! None of this is about you! All of this is about me! None of my reasons for keeping this from you are about you."

"How can your reasons for lying to me not be about me?"

"Will you listen to yourself?" Clark sighed and covered his face with his hand.

Thank you for writing this. When I read a fan fiction reveal where Lois' reaction is overly self-centered and immature, I just want to scream. And I agree that prolonged groveling by Clark is out of character. After all, he is the one who early on sent her to the Sewage Reclamation Plant.

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Lol Lois’ reaction reminded me of how she reacted in Death of Superman in the DC Animated Universe. This was great! Keep it up


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I'm glad you guys liked the story! grin Writing it was somewhat cathartic.

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And I agree that prolonged groveling by Clark is out of character. After all, he is the one who early on sent her to the Sewage Reclamation Plant.
I totally agree! Clark stands up for himself. He often defers to Lois and lets her take charge, but he doesn't let her push him around.


"It is a remarkable dichotomy. In many ways, Clark is the most human of us all. Then...he shoots fire from the skies, and it is difficult not to think of him as a god. And how fortunate we all are that it does not occur to him." -Batman (in Superman/Batman #3 by Jeph Loeb)
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Aww, cute story and a nice reveal. Well done! Good to see you around the boards!


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"So my parents taught me to hide what I could do. I watched all the other kids and figured out how to act normal. How to take a punch without breaking the other guy's hand. How to fake a cold when a virus was going around. How to not react to all the things I could hear going on in the next room, or the next building, or the next town over. When I was ten, I asked my parents for glasses so that I would look nerdier. No one thinks you're super strong if you're a four-eyes."

Reading this made me realize just how much pain and isolation Clark suffered from as a child. Wearing glasses was actually quite normal compared to everything else! Yet, despite the obstacles of growing up with these amazing (and frightening) abilities he was able with the patient assistance of Martha and Jonathan, to mature into a man with principles and a desire to help. Not too bad if I say so myself.

Lois does overreact to a certain degree and that's because as Superman, Clark spent a lot of time with her, making her feel as if there could be more between them someday. Big mistake.

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"Um, yeah. I guess I have to after that." She stared at Clark in shock for a few moments more before her expression changed to confusion, then anger. "You've been Superman this whole time, and you didn't tell me," she fumed. "Why didn't you tell me? Don't you trust me? I thought I meant something to you, Clark -- Superman -- whoever you are! You've been lying to me for years! For the entire time I've known you! Did it amuse you to go behind my back like that? To play me for a fool?"

The lady has trust issues. But still, Clark was keeping the secret to protect her and those he loved safe from criminals out for revenge and the media which was hungry for a story.

Great job Mrs Mxyzptlk! It is awesome to have you back!

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How refreshing to read a story that has such a fantastic 'moral of the story!' So glad to see Clark explaining to Lois the real reason he kept things from her. Maybe Clark in the show never had the opportunity to see it that way. It always bothered me that Lois never seemed to understand that he was going to tell her and that fact mattered. But then if it had really happened this way, what strife and tension would we have had to look forward to instead?
Excellent piece!


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