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You can find the story here. I doubt this works for my April Comedy Challenge, even though I hope I did get a few chuckles out of you. But my Betas told me I should post this before I was tempted to change / rework it again. I wasn't sure if I should call this a 1/1 Complete story or not as I will be posting Lois's POV from the night before (the Prequel) probably in a week. Both stories go together, but also work as one-shots. Thank you for reading. Comments always appreciated and gobbled up.
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VirginiaR. "On the long road, take small steps." -- Jor-el, "The Foundling" --- "clearly there is a lack of understanding between those two... he speaks Lunkheadanian and she Stubbornanian" -- chelo.
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Does this have anything to do with the similarly named movie? Description: Extended scene from “The Prankster”. Clark’s POV. He had overslept; with Lois asleep in his arms, he didn’t really want to move off the sofa and return to his bed alone. Right. Duh! Lois stayed over. For some reason I thought the sleeping referred to his frozenness. Also, he could have moved her over into his bed with him and then, the next morning, things could have taken their natural courses. Another quick scan showed him that Lois was still asleep. LOIS: *Please don’t let him notice I spied on Superman stripping. Please don’t let him notice I spied on Superman stripping. Please don’t let him notice I spied on Superman stripping. * “Hey, Clark. Wow, the phone didn’t even ring,” Jimmy said. Oops? CLARK: What? You think that’s worse than having Lois wake up from her peaceful slumber and get into danger again? “Okay. Great!” Clark said. He saw Lois stretch from where she lay on the sofa. LOIS: *Mmmmm… I smell fresh story…* Clark explained, watching as Lois picked up a piece of cold pizza and stuck it into her mouth. CLARK: “That’s when I discovered that you weren’t awake. You were actually talking in your sleep,” Lois said. Oops? She didn’t wake-dream it? “I was… what? I don’t…” Clark said, shaking his head. No, that would be really bad. Worse than those times he had floated in his sleep. Okay, maybe not worse… LOIS: And *then* I kissed you on the check and you grumbled and floated us back down to the couch. “I love you. Present tense, but since I am telling you what happened in my dream, it sounds like the past tense,” Lois clarified, running his tie through her fingers. Michael
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Waiting for Lois' POV
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This was FANTASTIC!! I was on the edge of my seat the whole time, wondering what Lois would say next. Can't wait to hear her side of the story!
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Michael: Thanks for the FDK. Does this have anything to do with the similarly named movie? You mean "While You Were Sleeping"? (one of my Favorite movies, BTW), but no. Right. Duh! Lois stayed over. For some reason I thought the sleeping referred to his frozenness. Also, he could have moved her over into his bed with him and then, the next morning, things could have taken their natural courses. Lois hitting him in the head with 2x4? LOIS: *Please don’t let him notice I spied on Superman stripping. Please don’t let him notice I spied on Superman stripping. Please don’t let him notice I spied on Superman stripping. * Oops? CLARK: What? You think that’s worse than having Lois wake up from her peaceful slumber and get into danger again? Thanks, Michael.
VirginiaR. "On the long road, take small steps." -- Jor-el, "The Foundling" --- "clearly there is a lack of understanding between those two... he speaks Lunkheadanian and she Stubbornanian" -- chelo.
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KateB: Thank you. I'm thinking of posting it late Saturday night or on Sunday. Half-way between Wrong Clark postings. Ultra Lucille: Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. Sorry, I needed to read that line again. I was on the edge of my seat the whole time, wondering what Lois would say next. Can't wait to hear her side of the story! I'm so happy this worked. Her's is a slightly different tone, which is why I separated the POVs, because together in one story (which they were originally) for some reason didn't sound right. They are both one-shots, which happen to go together.
VirginiaR. "On the long road, take small steps." -- Jor-el, "The Foundling" --- "clearly there is a lack of understanding between those two... he speaks Lunkheadanian and she Stubbornanian" -- chelo.
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I love that. Clark should have been afraid once she said she had woken up, even though that does happen in dreams. I think that is the first in sleep revelation story. I figured Clark was doomed from the point where Lois said he saved her from the blender.
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I really enjoyed this story. John is right, Clark's goose was cooked as soon as he flattened the blender.
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John: Thanks for the FDK and applause. Hmmm. Yes, that's about when he started getting nervous.
VirginiaR. "On the long road, take small steps." -- Jor-el, "The Foundling" --- "clearly there is a lack of understanding between those two... he speaks Lunkheadanian and she Stubbornanian" -- chelo.
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You mean "While You Were Sleeping"? (one of my Favorite movies, BTW), but no. Yeah. Lois hitting him in the head with 2x4? Erm…now I understand why there’s such apparent lack of progress. /talks to Perry about signing Lois up for some biology 101 courses/ Michael
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Originally posted by Darth Michael: Erm…now I understand why there’s such apparent lack of progress. /talks to Perry about signing Lois up for some biology 101 courses/ LOIS: Clark, what's up with Perry? First he sends us to that never ending Safety Seminar and now Human Anatomy classes. Am I missing something? CLARK: <tilts down glasses> Nope. It's all there. LOIS: <swats at her partner> CLARK: <deftly steps away in time>
VirginiaR. "On the long road, take small steps." -- Jor-el, "The Foundling" --- "clearly there is a lack of understanding between those two... he speaks Lunkheadanian and she Stubbornanian" -- chelo.
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Originally posted by Darth Michael: ER: Clark! <<Shocked>> What about the double standard? CLARK: Um... er... Double standard? Right. I'm not supposed to do that, am I? My bad. CLARK: What? I saw two... Not that they where standard. I mean, yes, they're standard equipment, but they where definitely not standard.
LOIS: <<pulls out bat to keep the competition away>>
CLARK: I mean... /psst. the prequel While You Slept... already up for your viewing pleasure./
VirginiaR. "On the long road, take small steps." -- Jor-el, "The Foundling" --- "clearly there is a lack of understanding between those two... he speaks Lunkheadanian and she Stubbornanian" -- chelo.
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/notices subtle hint/ Alas...Not unless you can alter time, speed up the harvest or teleport me off this rock. Michael
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Morgana: Ooooh! Bonus FDK! Its been ages since hearing this song. Thanks for the trip back in time! I'm a big fan of what is now considered "the oldies" and am often inspired by them. The Romantics did have a good song or two, even if their music videos left much to be desired.
VirginiaR. "On the long road, take small steps." -- Jor-el, "The Foundling" --- "clearly there is a lack of understanding between those two... he speaks Lunkheadanian and she Stubbornanian" -- chelo.
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