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Good part! Jose
"Practice up your shielding spells...and remember to duck if you see green light coming your way." Harry Potter to Wizengamot in OotP trial A Bad Week in the Wizengamot
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Hey! When did Superman become the enemy? All at once he's the bad guy for not being every where at once.What's up with that?
"I'm red-eyed, tired and drunk" Teri Hatcher "Fun will now commence" 7of9
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Incredible characterizations and insight into her thoughts and how she has all these conflicting feelings.
She blames herself. She's angry. She blames superman. Very realistic imho.
I was actually waiting for her to get angry at him after that last part - it *isn't* his fault but the way her anger rose, and how she 'trusted' him to always save her makes complete sense to this reader.
Keep going - this is great!
Silence is violence. End white supremacy based violence
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Looks like Clark is about to realize that he's not only Clark and not only Superman but both; that the woman he loves needs to love him in both guises.
He's got a guilt complex and Lois (understandable) reproaches towards Superman aren't helping. They'll end up in quite some emotional tangles if they don't work it out very soon.
Keep the chapters coming!
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Hi, Great part. She really need help. “Hm, this is very interesting, Lois.” Clark was reading the mug. “It says here, ‘Your name of Lois has created a practical, responsible, stable nature, and you desire to direct the efforts of others rather than to take order or ask permission. You have a determined, self-reliant, capable nature and resent any interference, although in your desire to help, you are inclined to become involved in the lives and decisions of other people. You like to make your own decisions and to be the master of your domain. You feel a limitation in your own expression when it is necessary to reach another through tact and understanding.’ That’s pretty accurate. Wow.”
Lois laughed. “Yeah, Lucy thought so, too. She said it was scary how accurate that mug was.”
Clark turned the mug over to see that on the other side, it said, ‘The name Lois means Battle Maiden.’ “Battle Maiden, eh?” Clark chuckled. “I’d say that’s pretty much on target. You’re a fighter.” Beautiful! “...the third victim, Amanda Byers, is described as a well-dressed 41-year old African-American female,” proclaimed the news anchor grimly. “She was found dead at four o’clock in the morning on the G train. The victim was given an overdose of GHB, a drug commonly used in date-rape situations. While unconscious, Byers was raped and left to die on the train.”
Clark had set the mugs down and stood, motionless, behind the sofa. He rested his hands on Lois’ shoulders gently.
The newsman continued, “The police have dubbed the attacker as the Hyde and SEEC rapist because he seems to strike between the Hyde Street stop and the State Environmental and Ecological College stop on the G train. The first victim was sexually assaulted last Thursday morning. Another passenger entered the train, preventing the criminal from committing the rape. The second victim was raped and found on Saturday morning around the same time. Both women survived. Because the victims were unconscious during the attack, it will be very difficult for police to identify the Hyde and SEEC rapist. If you have any information, or saw any suspicious behavior on or near the G train, please contact the Metropolis Police Department immediately.”
Maria D. Ferdez. --- Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age. MAF
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Wanda An excellent part! Tricia
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Wanda, Wow, this is a very powerful story. It just keeps getting better and better. You are dealing with a tough subject in a very honest manner. ‘After all,’ she thought, ‘this is my own damn fault. I should never have been there in the first place.’ Aside from all that, Lois had been very lucky. She had not been raped; she was saved in the nick of time. ‘Rape victims need counseling. I don’t,’ she mused. Here we see Lois blaming herself, minimalizing the crime, and insisting she can handle this on her own. This paragraph just screams, "I need help!" Too bad George is in an alternate universe. I have found Lois and her reactions (including her anger at Superman) very believable. Excellent story! Keep posting, and I will keep reading! - Vicki
"Hold on, my friends, to the Constitution and to the Republic for which it stands. Miracles do not cluster and what has happened once in 6,000 years, may not happen again. Hold on to the Constitution" - Daniel Webster
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Great part, Wanda! I think it's completely understandable Lois is blaming first herself and then Superman; she is upset, hurting and very, very angry, so she has to direct all this angry towards someone: first of all herself (she wouldn't have to be there, so it's her fault), then Superman (he's her hero and good friend, he's safe to be angry to), obviously the rapist, but he's a indinstinct, without a face and very dangerous stranger, so it's more difficult focusing her feelings towards this man. But I'm not George, I don't know if this reading is right or completely wrong! THe most important thing... continue to posting! Simona
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Another night?! Did he mean he’d stay over more than one night? “Hm. I think I’d like that,” Yeah even I would like that looking fwd to next part and... more about Hyde & SEEC
If she had to move heaven and Earth, perhaps come back to haunt Perry and explain the story after they'd killed her, she would do it.
Waking a Miracle by Aria
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