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Well, he did the right thing. It was smart to just let Clark and Lois have their privacy. Clark didn't need to know how much he guessed. He seems to be on the road to recovery and his little girls will help him stay on that road too. Very good story. Different and interesting and very touching. Nice job! Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
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Lovely ending. Jake has come a long way towards healing and his girls will benefit from that.
You made Jack out of nothing and made me care about him, worry about him and ultimately be happy for him. I really enjoyed this.
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Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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Very well done for a first segment in a very long and complete epic that will detail the growth and movement of this intensely formed friendship.
In other words. More. Your style of writing really pulls me in . I love the angst, the details that make it real for me. Superlative.
Silence is violence. End white supremacy based violence
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Hi, Congratulations! 
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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I didn't post FDK along this story, but I read since the beginning.  I confess that at first I took no much interest in the story, but like it progressed, I became more and more hooked to it.  Awesome story! Andreia
"My wife's love is what unites Krypton and Earth in my heart. Without it, without her, I truly would be in hell."
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/me wipes away a tear That was such a great story.  JD
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Diane Congratulations on an excellent story. Tricia 
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 This was a great story! I've liked how, even though Jake is the obvious good samaritan in the title, there has been an underlying theme that Clark is actually Jake's good samaritan, too. Here's Jake, who finds the incapacitated superhero and, not knowing what to do, brings him home. And then watches as the person behind the superhero facade is revealed to him. And then here's Clark, who even though he has no superpowers at the moment, is able to help Jake back to the land of the living. I've always liked that part of Clark, the fact that he doesn't have to be doing something super to help someone out. And I don't mean carrying someone's packages, although he does that, too. I mean "saving" someone in a less tangible way. Like with Jake. I added, "Feel free to stop in next time you're landing wayward planes in the area." 
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Well. Aside from my extreme disappointment that the story is over...  What a wonderful, satisfying ending, including Jake's little glimpse into the frustration of Superman's world and the... er... more human aspects of Clark's.  Talk about catharsis. It's wonderful to know Jake ends up at peace with himself and with his children. I enjoyed your final paragraphs; they weren't an ending as much as a direction, pointing us towards a happier future for Jake's family. This one was really special, Diane. Thanks for sharing. Hazel
Lois: You know the deal.
Clark: Superman gets the guys in capes, Lois and Clark get the guys in suits.
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Do you know the most surprising thing about divorce? It doesn't actually kill you, like a bullet to the heart or a head-on car wreck. It should. When someone you've promised to cherish till death do you part says, "I never loved you," it should kill you instantly.
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Wow. I just read the whole story, and I'm blown away. I love the insight into Jake's thoughts, and how, by saving Superman, Superman saved him. Along with the revelation. I was blushing along with Jake during the next-to-last phone call he made. Absolutely wonderful. 
"You need me. You wouldn't be much of a hero without a villain. And you do love being the hero, don't you. The cheering children, the swooning women, you love it so much, it's made you my most reliable accomplice." -- Lex Luthor to Superman, Question Authority, Justice League Unlimited
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I just wanted to say thank you all so very much for sticking with the story to the end and posting such wonderful feedback. I've taken a lot of your suggestions in mind, and as I work on tweaking the story before I submit it, I'm considering what all you've mentioned On a specific note for this part: The only thing you might consider changing is the OxyContin. Noted! I knew oxycodone was used, and knew OxyContin contained oxycodone, so I figured hey that worked, but didn't take into consideration that some stuff might be more potent than others. I followed up with some more specific research and discovered you're absolutely right. I guess I futzed that a bit I had a blast writing this, especially figuring out how to make an original character interesting, especially in this fandom where Lois and Clark is such a key fixture in each and every story. I really loved finding ways to include both L&C (thanks again, Yvonne, for the phone idea!). A big thank you once again to all my alpha and beta readers And thanks to everyone for giving something slightly different a chance
Grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change,
The courage to change the things I can,
And the wisdom to know the difference.
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