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FDK--> All the Kings Horses #23542 08/19/05 02:28 AM
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Anonymous Unregistered A	Quote ‘Hurry,’ they screamed. ‘Save her.’ You had me right HERE during that whole section!! That one line style, like hammering, bam, bam, bam! and getting closer and closer to edge. TEEEEEEEEJ

Re: FDK--> All the Kings Horses #23543 08/19/05 04:36 AM
Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 699 Ontario, Canada IreneD Columnist
IreneD Columnist Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 699 Ontario, Canada	Wow! Very well done, David! As TJ pointed out, you really upped the tension with the short one-line style. Reading each line was like being punched! Good job and I'm definitely looking forward to more. Irene I try to take one day at a time, but sometimes several days attack me at once.

Re: FDK--> All the Kings Horses #23544 08/19/05 08:55 AM
Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 3,454 London (the one in Ontario, Ca... Wendymr Pulitzer
Wendymr Pulitzer Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 3,454 London (the one in Ontario, Ca...	Wow. Once again, David, your writing has the power to make me catch my breath and want - no, need - to go back and re-read sections to allow the full effect to sink in. So well done. So understated, and so powerful. I wasn't sure that anything could cap Clark's ferocious, agonising struggle in the cage, or Lois's tears back in her apartment with her mother. But then you wrote this: Quote Her heart skipped a beat when she saw him. Beaten. When she saw him, lying there, on her floor. A tangled heap of broken man, blue spandex, and tattered red cape. And she knows he's Clark, right? Or is she going to think she imagined the voice sounding like Clark? Just one thing... where is Lex while all this is going on? MORE! What's your posting schedule??? Wendy Just a fly-by! waves

Re: FDK--> All the Kings Horses #23545 08/19/05 10:53 AM
Joined: Dec 2004 Posts: 1,702 Canada J jackiek Merriwether
jackiek Merriwether J Joined: Dec 2004 Posts: 1,702 Canada	Wow! That was great. Very intense. Jackie Superman: I hear you've been looking for me. Lois: All my life.

Re: FDK--> All the Kings Horses #23546 08/19/05 03:39 PM
Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 4,058 NY Laurach Pulitzer
Laurach Pulitzer Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 4,058 NY	Oh what they said David! Good job, more soon. LAura Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?” Caroline's "Stardust"

Re: FDK--> All the Kings Horses #23547 08/19/05 07:41 PM
Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 2,992 Sydney Australia T TriciaW Pulitzer
TriciaW Pulitzer T Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 2,992 Sydney Australia	David WOW! You have me completely hooked. Please post more soon. Tricia

Re: FDK--> All the Kings Horses #23548 08/20/05 12:52 PM
Joined: Nov 2004 Posts: 457 QLD, Australia D Dave Beat Reporter
Dave Beat Reporter D Joined: Nov 2004 Posts: 457 QLD, Australia	Wow! Thanks for the fdk TJ - I'm glad you liked the one line style, I'm always worried when I write that way, that people will be tearing their hair out Wendy - Once again, your fdk has made me grin like a fool all day Tricia - Amazing? TJ, Irene, Wendy, Laura, Jackie, Tricia... thank you all so much. I'm glad you enjoyed part one... I just hope you don't hate me when it's over 'I just kind of died for you; You just kind of stared at me' - Aurora, Foo Fighters

Re: FDK--> All the Kings Horses #23549 08/20/05 10:41 PM
Joined: Aug 2005 Posts: 151 London, England SNL Hack from Nowheresville
SNL Hack from Nowheresville Joined: Aug 2005 Posts: 151 London, England	David, Fantastic part 1 - look forward to reading more. SNL

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