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Thanks for reading and commenting on this monster of a story. Any and all feedback welcome.

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I'm still following your "monster of a story", Rac...and I'm anxiously waiting for Clark to return home and meet his son and his Nobel Peace Prize winning wife!

I know you're going to throw a couple more wrinkles in the story before it concludes!

You must have the most comprehensive "New Krypton" story in all of LnC fanfic!


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Rac, you're setting us up for a really big whammy, and I can hardly wait for the hammer to fall.

Great that Ultra Woman, not Lois Lane, has won the Nobel Prize for Peace. Maybe this will help her to realize that she isn't wasting her time, that her efforts are showing positive results.

Rae Et sounds like the reports of Hitler in the bunker in April 1945, when he ordered armies that didn't exist into positions which couldn't be defended to use weapons he didn't have to destroy attackers that wouldn't quit. There's something very sinister - even cataclysmic - about to happen, and I eagerly await the kaboom.

Keep it up! Like Clark, I can see a light at the end of the tunnel. I just hope it's not a train headed my way.


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Hi Rac,

I too am still following your story, and like Terry, I'm on the edge of my seat, waiting for the other shoe to fall. I'm sure this is the calm before the storm, and I just hope that poor Clark isn't kept for another few years on New Krypton.

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Really loved how Clark used the meditation technique to visualize his time with Lois. I wonder if he will use it to visualise what Lois has been going through as Ultrawoman?

And also really liked Clark's apology to Zara. It was time for him to do that and I was reminded of the old Clark Kent as he spoke. smile

Talan's plea to Clark to respect her right to keep her secrets:

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"But I am asking you, as a friend, to let this go."

Clark nodded silently. Apparently being a better friend was going to be more difficult than he thought.
Yes - sometimes, you have to acknowledge when you're not the right confidant - that you can help in other ways. Let's hope that Clark respects Talan's request to back off.

But poor Lois- so alone - even Martha and Jonathan are worried, knowing that they are not enough. What will happen to her, I wonder? She's at the breaking point.

Time for Clark to go home. Lois needs him. Forget the trial: Clark can tape his evidence and trust to the NK's competence to carry out the trial. (I'm now wearing my "reunite Lois and Clark" t-shirt smile )

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Hi,

Great part! drool


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She left his office and exited the newsroom the same way she'd entered. Lois had never imagined this would happen. She certainly didn't want the award and didn't feel like she'd earned it. A few minutes later, she touched down outside the farmhouse, where the leaves were turning and the harvest nearing completion. Inside the house, her in-laws and Jon looked up at her from the kitchen table, where they'd just sat down to lunch.

"What did Perry want? It sounded serious," Martha asked.

"Nothing really," Lois replied with a disinterested shrug.
frown Is not Lois recognition is Ultrawoman.
grumble Not person only the suit.


More ASAP, please.

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This is both hopeful and worrying.

It's going to be very hard for Clark to go through that trial and relive he horrible torture he had to suffer at the hands of Nor. Undoubtedly his mind if shying away from reminding itself of what it was like. Clark probably fears, or possibly subconsciously knows, that he will have a mental breakdown it he allows himself to delve too deeply into those repressed memories. On the other hand, it could be that those memories will be easier to deal with and not so crippling if he finds a way to acknowledge them and incorporate them into his image of himself, as a part of the experiences that have shaped him as a person.

Lois is getting more and more tense, and she's finding it harder and harder to accept all the things that she can't fix as Ultrawoman. Is she feeling, now, that she has received the Nobel Peace Prize for making shameful compromises? I hope she will reach a stage where she can see that she has been a powerful and inspirational force for good, and that she will be able to accept the Peace Prize in that spirit.

Like Carol, I loved the way Clark was able to relax when he reminded himself of that happy day when he was having a pillow fight with Lois. What a beautiful way to describe his perfect contentment:

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He remembered a day, about a week before he'd left, in his apartment when she'd been left to fend for herself with his soon-to-be mother-in-law on the phone. She'd retaliated by starting a pillow fight with him. He felt the corners of his mouth turn upward in a small smile at the memory. About to be married to the most wonderful woman in the world, a woman who thought nothing about throwing pillows at the head of the Man of Steel, he couldn't have been happier.
However, at the same time as Clark has begun to meditate, and has been able to find some peace through that, Talan has stopped meditating. And Clark was going to almost force her to explain why, unaware that it all has to do with her need to feel human in her unhappy and unrequited love for him. Please let him not force the issue. Please let him accept, as the friend of Talan that he wants to be, that this is not the question he should ask her.

Terry has pointed out that Rae Et's is sounding like Hitler in the bunker in 1945, and her lack of soldiers bears some resemblance to the increasingly desperate situation during the end of World War II in Nazi Germany, whose young adult male population was almost wiped out at that time. It's impossible to feel sorry for Rae Et, of course. Will she, unlike Hitler, be able to mount a last, devastating and victorious attack?

I, too, was moved by how Clark reached out to Zara and Ching, and how he found out about Zara's inability to have children, and his brotherly-loving comforting of her.

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Awesome...simply wonderful smile

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Hi everyone, thanks for your comments.

Thank you for taking the time to comment on the story, Chris. I'm glad to hear that you're still reading. There definitely are some twists left in this story, and I do anticipate it being the longest NK story ever written.

Hi Terry, thanks for your comments. Some outside perspectives on her work might well help Lois reflect on her work. As for Rae Et, she may be monomaniacal, but she's still really, really dangerous.

Jenni, thanks for the feedback. I really appreciate your comments. Something ominous may well be afoot, but that's all you'll get out of me. More is coming up soon.

Hi Carol, I agree that it was about darn time for Clark to apologize to Zara. And as you mentioned, we have to hope that while he's trying to repair his friendships, he realizes that sometimes being a good friend means backing off when you're asked.

Maria, thanks for your feedback. I think it's reasonable for the world to recognize Ultrawoman and not Lois for her work. The world has no idea who is the woman under the suit.

Hi Ann. I agree that Clark has some difficult ordeals ahead of him. It's going to take a lot of strength to testify and it's going to require a lot of courage, too. I'm glad you enjoyed the meditation scene (btw, the interlude Clark remembers actually did happen in the first story - this trilogy isn't all angst and darkness). And you're right that I've definitely put Talan in an unenviable position.

LLWB, glad you enjoyed this part. More is coming up soon.

Thanks for your comments, everyone.

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