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Hi! Glad you decided to post! Good intro, I'm interested to see where you take this, there are quite a few possibilities. I'm new at posting. I didn't realize that the formatting wouldn't look the same.
I don't know what to do to fix it.
Also, I don't have a beta-reader, so any mistakes are all me. If you need to edit your post there's a button at the top of the post to do that. The fourth one over, with the paper and pencil. Also, if you'd like a beta I'm available. I'm not the best at spelling/grammar stuff, but I can definitely give things a look over and I'm pretty good to bounce ideas off of. I guess I'm being a little presumptuous, but I thought I'd offer!
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Cute. The formatting definitely made it harder to read, but I sent you a PM about it. And Jessi explained it here.
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*yay* for first time posters!  “Clark, what’s going on? The last thing I remember is working on my story, then nothing, until the moment I woke up, naked, in your arms, in your bed! What did you do to me?” she asked him, glaring at him. Oh, Lois... like you had nothing to do with it! LOL! It kinda takes two. hehehe! Nice start - I'll be looking for the next one.
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Welcome! It's always good to have a new writer. Especially if it's going to be nfic. And your story looks like it might head in that direction...
I pretty much liked the beginning - especially the floating bit - and can't wait to find out where it leads.
Apart from my comments, I can also offer to do some beta-reading for you. Unlike Jessi, I'm strongest in spelling (unless there're typos involved), and I know some grammar. Since I'm not a native speaker of English, I lack a little in everyday sort of stuff, like slang or some such. But I think that, between the three of us, whe should be able to make things work quite nicely.
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Hey, welcome! And it's almost ok with the formatting; it's just easier to read when there are some hard returns separating paragraphs. Like this. Or that.  JD
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Thanks to those of you who have posted feedback.
Jessi Untalented and Olympe, I accept your offers of beta reading. How does it work?
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I think you send them e-mails with future parts for them to look over and give you suggestions, but certainly, arrange with them how it will work.
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FYI:
Just to let everyone know, I'll be trying to post regularly. It will depend on my homework and work load.
Also, I don't want this to be an nfic story, but I'm not sure how to keep this from happening.
Any help with this is greatly appreciated.
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