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What a very, very lovely story! I know I should be mad at Lois for using him like that. For testing out what he gives her out of the goodness of his heart. But frankly, my dear, I don't give a damn.  Well, not too much of one. I think I understand. She just can't believe he's not too good to be true. It's very Lois Laneish. I read the part where he carries her to her apartment in his arms, and melted into a useless puddle of pink fluff.  I loved how long it was and as I read it, wished it would take a really long time to end. I think this is going on my list of all-time favourite vignettes. Great work! Still encased in a warm, fuzzy pink cloud, Hasini. 
“Is he dead, Lois?”
“No! But I was really mad and I wanted to kick him between the legs and pull his nose off and put out his eyes with a freshly sharpened pencil and disembowel him with a dull letter opener and strangle him with his own intestines but I stopped myself just in time!”
- Further Down The Road by Terry Leatherwood.
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This is... bone-meltingly sweet and wonderful and WAFFy. Such a romantic woman's fantasy -- drop-dead gorgeous guy who's willing to do anything for you, with no expectation of anything in return?
I do love the way you wrote Clark's reactions to her erratic and unusual behavior... so that when it came down to it, he could take control and get things out in the open where they could both enjoy them.
Just beautiful.
PJ
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Yes, this was sweet. Hey, you know what they say - if it's too good to be true...it is. Well, usually, anyways. 
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Just wonderful! Wonderful, lovable, adorable, sweet, sweet, honestly kind and loving Clark...yes, too good to be true. And yet, he is for real. And he loves Lois. Oh, the warm, warm fuzzy feeling I get out of this vignette ought to be enough to shield me from the blizzard that is expected here in southern Sweden on Monday morning! Oh, so beautiful!  Ann
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Wow.. I loved it! I haven't read something that made me melt like this in a while. Oh and the laughter: Well, she did have a dead battery. But it was the kind of thing he’d have said if it was a genuine battery death, rather than murder. Battricide. Whatever. That line made me laugh so hard. I have the biggest dorkiest smile on my face right now. Thank you for giving me a great start to my day. 
Angry Clark: CLARK SMASH!
Lois: Ork!
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Yes, battricide. You should submit that to a dictionary.
I think, therefore, I get bananas.
When in doubt, think about time travel conundrums. You'll confuse yourself so you can forget what you were in doubt about.
What's the difference between ignorance, apathy, and ambivalence?
I don't know and I don't care one way or the other.
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I loved this story! I agree with the others in that Lois was taking advantage of Clark's good nature. But it does capture the insecurity of first season Lois.
As I was reading the story, Roy Orbison's classic song "You Got It" was playing through my head.
-Em
"But my experience is that as soon as people are old enough to know better, they don't know anything at all."
-Oscar Wilde, "Lady Windermere's Fan"
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I absolutely loved "battricide" too... and I love Roy Orbison's song.
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Janet, you do this so well. I loved this fic. I really did. It was just... and... not to mention.... well, darn. I can't find the words. But I loved it.
lisa in the sky with diamonds
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Oh yes, that "battricide" thing was funny I should have mentioned that as well.
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Awww!!! I loved this, it was just so... awww!!! At the risk of sounding a broken record... loved the battricide line. Very witty!! Every next line was just oozing with waff. One of the cutest and sweetest things I've read in a while. Thank you so much for sharing this with us!
Superman: Why is it that good villains never die?
Batman: Clark, what the hell are good villains?
=> Superman/Batman: Public Enemies
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Great story! And yes, I too loved the line about battricide.
"You take turns, advise and protect one another, even heal or be healed when the going gets too tough. I know! That's not a game--that's friendship!" ~Shelly Mezzanoble, Confessions of a Part-Time Sorceress: A Girl's Guide to the Dungeons & Dragons Game Darcy\'s Place
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Well, now, if it's going to produce more stories like this one, I reckon you should re-read every story I've ever written in the hope that you'll find more passages to inspire you. I might even send you some unfinished ones just in case....  Nicely done, Janet. Very nicely done. Phil
Ping! Ping!! Ping!!! -- Mother Box
She's such a chatterbox at times...
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Oh, I am such a fan of your writing! This was wonderful Well, she did have a dead battery. But it was the kind of thing he’d have said if it was a genuine battery death, rather than murder. Battricide. Whatever.  The Baby Bumblebee song. That ought to do it. If she even let herself *think* about that song, the tune would be stuck in her head for hours. ARGH! Now, why did you have to go and do that to me? *fights back with "Henry the Eighth"* His arms remained tightly around her. “No,” he repeated, his voice deeper and firmer than usual. It was a more commanding tone than she’d ever heard him use, and yet, somehow it was strangely familiar. “I finally have you where I want you, and –“ *sigh* I'm fluttering here... Lovely, lovely, lovely! You give us a sweet, sympathetic first-season Lois, and yet one who isn't out of character. Her many tests are very believable, and when she got the migraine I couldn't help but think of the Boy Who Cried Wolf. But even then, Clark doesn't let her down. I liked that in the end, she made the connection between Clark and Superman on her own. I liked everything about it, really. I see myself returning to this one when I need a pick-me-up one day, so thank you! Caroline
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 Thank you all for your lovely comments! You really made my day with your feedback! I'm so glad you all liked the 'battricide' line. Once again, that was one of the original thoughts that just flowed when I was getting my rough ideas down, and I built the scene around it. Phil, thanks again for your story and the lines which inspired this. I'm glad you like what I came up with. I'm glad, too, that you all feel I've managed to keep Lois and Clark in character. That was my goal - to explore the "what if" of Lois testing out her belief, but in a way that kept both of them "our" Lois and Clark. The song... well, whenever my husband is waiting for something, like our girls to get their socks and shoes on, or something, he starts to whistle that song. It drives me nuts because it stays in my head. Now, however, I'm thinking of "Henry the Eighth" for some reason.  Thank you all again for the lovely feedback! 'Toc
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