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#48800 12/30/07 11:56 AM
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Alisha - That was a really sweet piece of fluff. It was full of the type of Christmas spirit I love (save the man who bumped into them on the street).

It made me smile and that's quite a feat today.

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Cute little start of a story but now I want the rest. Laura


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Delightful. but we need more! I love the walk together, Lois peaceful almost seems like an oxymoron.

Thanks for sharing.

#48803 12/31/07 09:53 AM
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Very nice Alisha. I enjoyed this little Christmas treat! Hope to hear from you again soon!

~Sheila


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#48804 01/01/08 06:53 AM
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I love how obsessed Lois is with the box wink

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"Oh, please," Lois scoffed as she angled her chair so that she could see him without straining her neck, "I couldn't care less. *I'm* just making conversation."
*LOL* rotflol .. and I love Clark's reaction to this!!

Lovely story!!

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#48805 01/01/08 08:08 AM
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hehe - so very Lois to obsess about the box and hope that it's for her. smile And Clark making random conversation to prove a point was just so funny.

Nice story, Alisha! smile


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Sweet story, Alisha.

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I agree. I thought it was hilarious when Clark was making idle conversation. The price of gas? rotflol

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It probably wasn't even from Mayson. She should just wait for Clark to get back, and then ask him casually about the present, as if she hadn't given it a second thought. Which she hadn't. Not in the slightest.
Lois' fixation is so funny and her worries about Mayson were touching. I enjoyed watching Clark enjoy her frustration.
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Clark leant back in his chair and smiled in amusement as he watched Lois pretend to be engrossed in her work. Her pretence last almost a full minute, before he heard her voice float across to him, "So who's the present for?"

"It isn't for you," he replied and was rewarded for his words with a venomous look.
I was so hoping it was for her. At least he got her a decent cup of coffee.

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His laughter was infectious and she felt compelled to join him as they walked arm-in-arm through the snow, laughing together as the reflection of Christmas lights twinkled merrily in their eyes.
Sounds like the perfect ending to an episode.

Normally, I just love a good vignette, but this one left me wanting more. We never see resolution completely with the box. She never finds out what is in it, or more importantly that he has been thinking of her all along. She never comes to peace with anything other than their walk. I liked the story, I just wanted more.

Elisabeth

#48808 01/03/08 07:44 AM
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Hi guys, thanks for the feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

When I got the assignment I spent a few days torturing myself while trying to think of what the present was and who it was for, and that is where I got most of my inspiration from! That is also why we never find out what was in it.

I would love to write a sequel to explain the box's contents, but that will have to wait for me to discover what it is (and to finish Specimen). Anyone got any ideas to help me out? confused laugh

- Alisha


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