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Well, what do you think?
[LabRat: Just adding the part no. into the header of the thread.]
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Stop talking, start writing!!!
You know I love your stuff, but this first part isn't long enough...
It is cruel to give a tasty sample and not follow through with more!
Can't wait to see how Clark copes with the 'real world'.
"He's my best friend, best of all best friends
Do you have a best friend too
It tickles in my tummy
He's so Yummy Yummy
Hey you should get a best friend too" - Toy Box
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I agree with Lisa. You can't leave it there! Please post more soon!
Tara
Rose: You're NOT keeping the horse!
Doctor Who: I let you keep Mickey, now lets go!
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GAH!!!  Why?!! Why didn't you warn us that this was part 1/? and not a complete-in-itself vignette? How long do we have to wait now for part 2?? Darn it!! I need more!!! 
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Wow, poor Clark is in for a slight culture shock. I wonder how long it will take them to figure out what happend.
"We've been sitting here all night and the longest conversation you've had with a woman was when your mom called."
Leonard to Howard: The Big Bang Theory
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Have so little time for feedback, but... wow, Shayne! Your Lois Lane is living on our world? In the ordinary, there-are-no-superheroes and men-can't-fly and there-is-war-in-Iraq world? And she got the name of Lois Lane just because her parents were into a fantasy figure named Superman? And Clark lives in the world of LnC, wherever that might be, where men like him can indeed fly, except there is no Lois there, and Clark is involved with Lana? And then Clark is somehow transported to our world? And the military in our world want to shoot him down for saving an airplane, because they think he is a terrorist?
Oh, wow! What a situation! I just have to wonder, why was Clark transported to our world? Could it possibly be because he needs to be where Lois is, and in this fic she is in the "ordinary" world, not in the world of LnC?
Fantastic! Like the others said, I do hope you will continue.
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WHOA! This is awesome, Shayne. Get back here and post more ASAP!
lisa in the sky with diamonds
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Ditto.
More.
Now.
This afternoon at the latest.
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If she had to move heaven and Earth, perhaps come back to haunt Perry and explain the story after they'd killed her, she would do it.
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The beginning looks great. Now, where's the rest of the story?  My only comment is to what others have been saying in this topic. What I understand is not that Clark (Superman) is being attacked personally, but that an airplane, with no flight plan and no one knows about, which just simply appeared over the U.S. and is moving towards Washington, D.C., is seen as a threat to the nation, especially a few years after 9/11. This paragraph mentions this: An unidentified airplane heading for Washington was ominous. There were no records of this commercial jetliner leaving from any airport in the world, and given what had happened six and a half year before, no one was willing to take any chances. Just my two cents.  malu
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This is a very nice idea - Clark is really going to freak everyone out if it's our world!
I wonder if a certain comics company will sue?
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Shayne: Breathing heavily, Lois tried to ignore the pain in her side. If it hadn’t been for the heavy Kevlar vest, she’d be dead again. Do you mean that the Kevlar vest had saved her yet again from death, or that she had died before and was back? If the latter, it would be really intriguing; if the former, it's still an interesting red herring. In either case, this story really reaches out and grabs me! Can't wait for the next (hopefully longer) installment! -- Snave
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This is a really interesting plot. I already can see people coming at Clark saying "Do you think you´re Superman or something?" And he: "Who is Superman? My name is Clark Kent!" Uh oh... welcome to the real world!  Please continue soon!
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Oh, and don't forget the whole plane-load of people who are *also* now dislocated.
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Hell of a beginning, Shayne! I can't wait to find out what happens next! I love it when authors mess around with the universe. :p
JD
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But in this universe everyone knows Clark Kent is Superman, so the name is really moot.
I believe this is the first time anyone has brought a plane-load of witnesses when crossing from one universe into another.
I also believe it is the first time that Superman has ever brought a plane into Washington in a presumably post 9/11 world. Lois, who knows exactly where she is, must have a death threat if she believes she can arrive from Iraq and then sneak past security while there is a possible terrorist attack on DC. :rolleyes:
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Interesting premise. Very curious how you play it out.
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Shayne, I don't have a ton of time but I just wanted to add my name to the list of people who are very interested in this story!
Come back with more soon!
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Ditto! Too short! More soon. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
Caroline's "Stardust"
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