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I think it is a wonderfu| beginning and I would love to see how it continues  [Just adding the part no. into the post header - LabRat]
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Ditto  . Carol
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oh thank you both for commenting! That means a lot. I'm working on the next part.
So uh, to sound like the newbie I am, feedback to a story has a FDK thread?
LOIS:I don't like you.
MAYSON: Really? Oh god, that is such a relief - I don't like you either.
LOIS: That makes me feel so much better
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Yep - The drug known as FDK, also known as feedback, is the addictive substance fic writers can't get enough of . I'm waiting for part 2 - I loved how Jonathan was the reason Sam made the connection to Clark/Sman! Carol
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Wow that was really a great insight to Sam's character. loved it. I hope you continue it. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
Caroline's "Stardust"
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I love this. I have never read a fic with this particular spin, and I love it. Wow - you most definitely should continue. Please? Pleeeeease?
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Nice start. I also liked your use of Sam's pov. Makes him more human.
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I, too, liked your Sam's POV. Interesting. Please continue! (Uhhh... mind if you spell Jonathan Kent's name like this ?) Ann
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Ok now why didn't my spellcheck catch that mispelling of Jonathan's name, for crying out loud?. Sorry! Just goes to show that my proof reading skills are very lacking, LOL, Thank you for pointing it out to me!
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MAYSON: Really? Oh god, that is such a relief - I don't like you either.
LOIS: That makes me feel so much better
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I'm a firm believer in the fact that God doesn't put any more on us than we can bear. He does however make us come to Jesus every so often.
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Wow, great start. And yes: you should continue this
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Originally posted by lcfan4ever: Wow, great start. And yes: you should continue this Oh thank you! Definitely will be continuing - working on chapter 3 right now
LOIS:I don't like you.
MAYSON: Really? Oh god, that is such a relief - I don't like you either.
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