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If you wish to comment on this...
Tank (who still wonders if he should have waited before posting this ... like months)
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"Meg...who let you back in the house?" -Family Guy
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Tank, Hope you're feeling better.  I, too, eagerly await your next installment. You dropped a whammy on Clark with that "like a brother" line.  What's next? A piece of Kryptonite as a forget-me-not?  Can't wait.  
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Good stuff, good stuff..I wonder what's going to happen next?!  ~Liz
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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Great beginning! Thanks for not waiting, Tank! MORE, please. 
Do you know the most surprising thing about divorce? It doesn't actually kill you, like a bullet to the heart or a head-on car wreck. It should. When someone you've promised to cherish till death do you part says, "I never loved you," it should kill you instantly.
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Tank A great premise!  Lois's motives for leaving are very clear. Let's hope something or someone will change her mind. I can't wait to see where this is headed. Tricia 
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Oh, I love it, Tank! What a great premise! I can't wait to see what you have coming up in part 2 - and my brain is already whirring with ideas to continue it!  This is very well written. Lois's thought process is excellent - it all makes perfect sense and I can see where she's coming from. Clark's totally in character too - and poor Clark! First she asks him to come with her, which must have raised his hopes, and then she hits him with a huge whammy when she repeats that 'brother' line. You should never, ever retire. You're far too good a writer for that! Can't wait to see Part 2! Wendy
Just a fly-by! *waves*
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Great set-up Tank. Interesting <vbg>.
Yvonne
(who thinks she already knows how this particular web can be untangled)
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Interesting setup you wrote here... Willing to read more
"Practice up your shielding spells...and remember to duck if you see green light coming your way." Harry Potter to Wizengamot in OotP trial A Bad Week in the Wizengamot
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For Superman she was willing to give up her life in Metropolis and move away. Clark was just the friend that she'd like to have around. I think Clark undervalues himself: what Lois says that she makes a sacrifice for Superman but she can live without him, whereas she doesn't want to *live* without Clark. So, who is more important to her? Interesting that Clark doesn't even complate giving up Superman in order to be with Lois as Clark.
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Oh, wow, I don't think I've seen this side before. A W/T story that's completely angst driven. I'm not complaining, mind you, except with a boot to get the next part out quickly.  I can't wait to see what you're going to do with part 2, and how Wendy is going to "fix" it. I almost feel like crying along with Lois! 
"You need me. You wouldn't be much of a hero without a villain. And you do love being the hero, don't you. The cheering children, the swooning women, you love it so much, it's made you my most reliable accomplice." -- Lex Luthor to Superman, Question Authority, Justice League Unlimited
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TANK!!!! ARRGGHH!!!!!!  I wasn't going to read this one and you suckered me into it anyway... Post soon so that we can get Wendy's responce. James
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Excellent beginning - very well written and completely in character. I only have one concern... You could have had them say their farewell's, put Lois on a plane, and handed the baton over to Wendy. Instead, you end with Clark's cryptic "this isn't goodbye", and tell us you'll be back with Part II tonight. Hmmmmm.... Since Wendy's job it to fix the mess, and your job is to create it, am I to assume that Part II's sole reason for being is so you can make this situation even more dismal than it already is? With no small amount of trepidation, I am anxiously awaiting Part II. - Vicki 
"Hold on, my friends, to the Constitution and to the Republic for which it stands. Miracles do not cluster and what has happened once in 6,000 years, may not happen again. Hold on to the Constitution" - Daniel Webster
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Wow - What they said! Looking forward to more soon. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
Caroline's "Stardust"
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Well, Vicki, since you brought it up.... Keep watching this space. More coming soon. Tank (who missed out on his first PT appointment becaus he didn't get home from work in time, but will be charged a cancellation fee anyway  )
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Evil, Tank.
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Hi, Wow! Great piece.
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
MAF
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