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Thanks everyone!

Another touching chapter. I'd have liked to read more about Kal and Lois. This is just a fantastic story and I'm glad about every new part. Thank you so much for sharing!

Yay, they're back to talking. And thinking about not *taking*. Wonder what Lois is going to think Kal is going to say when the not talking ends up with much more body-language than she intended. After all, he's he Supreme Ruler, she's his concubine, a lot of not *talking* initiated by the concubine must have very serious consequences :p

The absence of any mentioning of Nor during the meting was quite conspicuous. Was he one agreeing or disagreeing. And did he agree or disagree with the inland or shore drilling?

Does Iolanthe already have part 14?

Michael

Yay, another part so soon, and it's the weekend so I could read it as soon as I saw it there! It was beautiful. So pleased Lois and Kal got chance to talk some more. I grin constantly throughout the Lois and Kal scenes.

Kal is having the same effect on Lois' writing as Clark. Just one of the many subtle reminders they are actually one and the same, just in a very different set of circumstances. He's awakening her heart just as she is his, though neither is of course fully aware of the effect they are having on the other.

Uh oh - watch out Kal.

There was such electricity when they were reunited after the fourteen long hours, both feeling equal amounts of butterflies and I just love the simplicity of their mealtime ritual. It's as though they have been doing the same for years.

They already know what the other is thinking.

She has yet to spell out why people on earth kiss each other, but Kal is beginning to understand even if he doesn't realise it. And he's definitely sure he likes it!

I just love how you show that such simple, often throwaway, words can change the meaning and enhance a conversation so much, and how strange it seems when the new-kryptonians don't have any comprehension of words such as 'please' and 'thank you'. As a result, when Kal uses them the meaning is heightened as if he is really making a statement.

These scenes are so enchanting!

A fantastic boost for the male-ego he doesn't realise he has!

Aww!

Kal is taking the lead this time, being much more forward. Well, forward in the context of their tender innocent relationship. He is so keen for another kiss.

Argh - so close!! He'll never get any work done.



Just a side note. It has much more to do with my falutly imagination than your descriptions but no matter how I try I still picture Kal in the black costume with the blue 's'. I don't know why, I wasn't even a particular fan of that costume. I think it's the best way I can imagine him without my traditional view of 'Clark' getting in the way. I have no trouble picturing Lois in whatever outfit you put her in.

Anyway, can't wait for what the next part has in store.

Emma

I love how Kal has a gift for languages, no matter where he grew up or what his name is. That's a very "Clark" quality, and I really like that it's not dependent on his being a Kryptonian growing up on Earth.

Of course, it helps that he has a good teacher ... and a big incentive to learn her language. Her smile is so wonderful, it's the definition of positive reinforcement.

I'm also glad that they are talking again, and are back to sharing their meals. I enjoy learning all the things Lois learns while they are apart, but I'm as anxious as she is to get them back in the same room. Those scenes are just wonderful.

The final scene, with Perry, has me intrigued, however. I've been operating on the assumption that Lois was on NK to stay. But the fact that you've shown up glimpses of what is happening on Earth makes me wonder what you have up your sleeve ...

More, please? I'm constantly stalking the boards in hopes of an update.

Okay, you've got to me hooked, like right now I should be doing school work. What a wonderful glimpse of the way things would be had Lois been the alien. Kal-El's qualities are innately good no matter where he is. And Lois has the ability to soften him no matter where she meets him.

I'm so glad that she is back in his room and promises to be there when he returns. I'm curious to know the protocol for Kryptonian--annulments? I see one coming. Though Krypton doesn't have a word for love, he sure shows a lot of it!

This is absolutely magnificent!

~Sheila

This was another fabulous part, and I am totally convinced that Kal has been on Earth. Lois's comment about Kal being able to speak foreign sounds was the kicker.

Nor is right to be concerned about Lois's arrival on the planet! And I wonder if Lois's little children's book is going to be more than she meant it to be.

Thank you for posting this part so quickly! Can't wait for more!

Amber

Hey, I'm beta-ing and it's great! Yes, Michael, I did get Part 14 and zipped it back to FH.

Even I don't know where this story is going (except for the next 3 parts) - Corrina keeps on ending the parts on cliffhangers!

So you can rest assured that there is plenty of juicy ficcy goodness left to come!

Can't help thinking that the mother could be Lara, Kal's mother. All right, I know, others have said that before!

Okay, but here's what I'm thinking. Kal has been "sent" to this horrible world to save it. I don't want to be too controversial here, but there is some sort of similarity between Kal and Jesus. God sent his "only begotten Son" to the world to save it, and Lara and Jor-El may have sent Kal to New Krypton to save it, though not by helping the NKers to gain eternal life in Heaven. But they may have sent him there to help the NKers find water and to generally straighten up their society and make it more humane (or Kryptonian?).

If Kal is some sort of "Jesus", that might partly explain why he is so untouched by the "evilness" of his society, which allows a man like Lord Nor to gain and kill concubines as he pleases.

Keep it coming, Corinna!

Ann

It is 12:45 am but I had to read this. Thanks for posting quickly. I am still loving it but I still want more! Laura

Corrina,

I just wanted to let you know how much I'm enjoying this story. You write extremely well and you've done a great job creating a strange new world for Lois and us to explore.

I'm always fascinated by other authors' interpretations of Kryptonians/New Krypton. I had to break with canon in order to make my story make sense because it was imperative that Kryptonians and Earth humans be the same species. I also wanted very much to make Kryptonian culture and society something worth saving. On the show, I didn't get that impression. People that were as technologically advanced as the Kryptonians but who were outright barbarians with no respect for individual rights weren't exactly the most sympathetic or interesting people to make Clark hang out with for four years.

I'm really enjoying seeing your different take on this - the Kryptonians still seem stuck in a backwards, feudal system, but even though Kal El doesn't know anything different, he is still willing to listen and take advice from a female alien of no standing in his society. Shades of Clark appear more and more in Kal El, even though he is clearly without the influence of Earth culture.

I'm also intrigued by your Kryptonians' strange emotional responses. The seven basic emotional responses - anger, fear, disgust, happiness, sadness, surprise, and contempt are universal in human beings. You could travel anywhere in the world and everyone would be able to identify these reactions in your expressions. Even tribes who have never had any contact with the outside world use the exact same facial expressions and recognize them in others for these seven emotional responses. These things aren't cultural, they're biological. The same is, of course, true for the human reproductive drive. No one has to teach it to you, it's just there. How strange and interesting it is to see a world without recognition of some of those basic emotional responses. And one in which at least Kal El seems to have had no particular drive to find a mate.

I'm intrigued and, like Lois, eagerly looking forward to learning more about this new world. Thanks for sharing this story.

Rac

bakasi I try to make sure there is a lot of Lois/Kal (because they're my favourite bits too) in each part, but without all the rest, the story isn't going to make sense.

Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

Michael I think there needs to be more talking before they get to the 'not talking'!

Thanks, Michael.

Emma

One of the fun parts for me in writing this was slipping 'Clark' into the story.

Kal is a leader (Clark was too, certainly as Superman), so I'm trying to balance his natural tendencies to lead with the overwhelming newness of his relationship with Lois.

About Kal's clothes - he *isn't* wearing the black suit! I don't think Lois could have failed to notice that!! He's wearing a jacket -similar to the one he wore over the black suit in TNAOS, but with long sleeves - and pants outfit.

However ... that black suit may just make an appearance!

Thanks for all your FDK, Emma.

Kathy Thanks for saying you like the scenes where they are apart. I know most, if not all of us (including me), like the together scenes most, but to get the into those scenes, they have to spend some time apart. And there's a whole new planet out there for Lois to explore!

Thanks, Kathy. Next part ... either tonight or tomorrow (my time).

Sheila

I know the feeling. Most of this fic has been written when I should/could have been doing something else.

Thanks for commenting, Sheila.

Amber There is so much I could say in reply to your FDK, Amber, but I can't find a way to say it without giving away more than I want to!

So, thanks ... your thoughts are ...

Iolanthe One of the reasons I've been able to post this quicker than I had originally thought is because of your always-speedy beta - which I appreciate more than you could realise.

Part 15 is being wilful - it wants to wander. Once I bash it into shape, it will arrive in your in-box.

Glad you 'liked' the cliffhangers!

Ann Interesting idea. The basis of your thinking is somewhat in line with my fic ... but not the rest.

I'm a Christian ... my feeling is that a story like that would have to be really, really carefully written.

But on a side note ... I have been amazed by all the ideas generated in the FDK threads. If, in the future I'm stuck for a story idea, I'm coming back here!!

Laura Late nights ... uhm ... this fic has given me a few of those!

Thanks for your FDK, Laura.

Rac Thanks for your comments, Rac.

I have to admit, I haven't read your fic - I've read very little the past month. Also, since starting this fic, I've deliberately stayed away from anything with even the slightest mention of NK because I don't want to inadvertently slip the ideas of others into my fic.

Interesting point about the society being worth saving. I agree, there didn't seem to be much shown in TNAOS. However, surely there were good people, even though the leaders were so bad.

Lois is going to meet some NKers and find out that even though the society seems stolid and unfriendly and straight-laced, individuals are not necessarily like that at all.


Thanks everyone,

Corrina.

Hi Corrina,

I'm late to the feedback party again, and a lot of my reactions have already been shared. Namely, that the awakening of hearts here is mutual, not one-sided, and that the mention of Perry smacks of an eventual return to Earth.

A couple of other thoughts:

- You said early on that you originally started this fic because Carol's Backwards wasn't quite as completely backwards as you had anticipated. I know you've moved way past that original premise, but I thought of it in this regard: not only is Lois now the Strange Visitor from Another Planet, she is also, in her own quiet way, the Hero of New Krypton. No one else may ever realize it, but if this drilling idea works it will have been Lois who saved them all, including herself, like Clark and the Nightfall asteroid.

- It's great to see Lois's investigative reporter personality begin to emerge. Her conversation with Jib showed what a consumate interviewer she is (a talent, by the way, which we don't see much of in the show). As she gets her feet under her after her tremendous culture shock, her strong personality is bound to emerge. She can't go back to her old life (or can she??? remains to be seen), but she's got to find a way to integrate her own personality into this new world. She has to adapt to this culture for her own survival, but can never be the kind of woman who was raised in this culture.

As for the Lois and Kal scenes, all I can say is that you are a tease Like Kal, we are left wanting more. Which, of course, is precisely the way you planned it.

Ann, there are definitely resonances between the Superman mythos and the Christian narrative. The writers of the Superman movies certainly milked them for all they're worth. "For this reason I have sent them you, my only son. They can be a great people if they wish to be. They only lack the light to show them the way." The Jor-El of the movieverse fancies himself a benevolent superior being sending his son to enlighten the poor benighted earthlings and bring out their latent potential for good. And his son must always remain above the earthlings. He must never descend to their level. And the scene after Superman throws Luthor's island into space--he's falling back to earth unconscious with his arms stretched wide--is an obvious visual allusion to the crucifixion. But I would argue that Jor-El's insistance that Kal-El remain distant, always above the humans, actually distinguishes his story from the gospel. The whole point, indeed, the scandal, of the incarnation is Emmanuel, God *with* us, no longer only *above* us. In this way TNAOS is closer because Clark is truly human. Indeed, that's his deepest desire--to belong, to fit in, to be accepted as one of us. But, unlike Jesus, Clark is also a fallen being, in need of forgiveness just like the rest of us. One of the things I love about TNAOS is the portrayal of forgiveness. Lois and Clark hurt each other, but, because they love each other, they also forgive each other. In fact, one could argue that the biggest difference between the movie world and the L&C world is Clark's humanity. In the SR movie Superman seemed startled to realize that Lois was angry with him--that he had, in fact, done something wrong. 'Our' Clark knows that he screws up just like everyone else. In fact, this question of Kal-El/Clark Kent's true self if the main difference between the movieverse and the Lois & Clark world. Is he mostly the high and mighty Kryptonian Lord who walks among us in lowly guise, or is he really one of us who happens to have some extra gifts and tries to use them to help as best he can? Which is where the parallels break down, because, in a paradox that none of us can really comprehend, Jesus claimed to be both God and human. I think Clark would be delighted to settle for plain human. (End of treatise--it's safe to come out now.)

Happy girl Thanks for your amazing FDK.

Re Carol's 'Backwards' - it wasn't so much that her fic didn't go as completely backwards - more that it went backwards in a completely different direction.

Re Lois being the 'Strange Visitor from Another Planet' - that was actually my initial title for this fic. I wasn't sure about any copyright issues in using that - and then I decided I liked 'Awaken My Heart' better.

But Lois certainly is a 'Strange Visitor from Another Planet'!

Thank you so much for what you said about the Superman story and the Christian faith. When I replied to the FDK yesterday morning, I had to go out and didn't have the time to frame a reply which would do justice to the subject.

When I got home, I discovered you had done a wonderful job of explaining it and I agree with everything you said.

Corrina.