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Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
I knew Superwoman would rescue and protect him! Let the mob overthrow Nor! Let the people want Kal El... Or maybe they escape to Earth to Martha and Jonathan, after Tek rewinds his mind to remember. Hmmmmm... What will happen? I must know! More soon. Laura smile1 hyper notworthy shock


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Yes!!! Ultra Woman to the rescue! I knew it!

How lovely it was that Kal was so perfectly ready to offer his life for Lois, but he was horrified that Lois would risk her life for him.

Ah yes, at first he was horrified, but then he was happier than ever, when he understood that she couldn't live without him any more than he could live without her.

But Kal is stuck in his thinking about the Law. He should listen to Eb. If you have to choose between life and the law, what should you choose? The answer should be obvious.

Anyway, now Kal and Lois have yet another reason to change the Law on New Krypton. Otherwise Eb will be sentenced to death since she gave the Oath and lied.

But Kal and Lois have to find a way to change the Law rather gently, to reinterpret it rather than to contemptuously overthrow it. Many people on New Krypton resent the Law, of course, but others literally live their lives by it, and you can't tell them that everything they believed in was worthless from beginning to end. You can't tell them that they have lived their lives literally for nothing.

And now Tek is going to bring them to his hiding place! Their is light on the horizon because Lois and Kal are being brought into the caverns of Tek!

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Great part! We still need Tek's spaceship!
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Excellent and exciting part. I loved how you brought Eb back into the story.

I cant wait to see where Tek takes them and what kind of things are stashed in his hide out.

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aargh! somebody get nor and get rid of him.

sweet torture!!!

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Hmmm, if Kal is convinced that he can't continue to live on New Krypton once he has offered his life, I am hoping that means he will eventually (after many more chapters, much angst and waffy stuff and a total revolution in the Kryptonian way of life) find a way to relocate--maybe to Earth?

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Heartbreaking and beautiful, Corinna! Looking forward to the solution to this dilemma, and to seeing Nor get his comeuppance.

It says something about the caliber of Kal's leadership that seeing him shot causes the NK population to finally lose their cool.

Bring on part 30!


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hyper for more ASAP!

hyper for Tek about to save the day.

And Lois proved she's faster than a speeding bullet.

Will try to leave more FDK tomorrow.

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Oh, yes, this ending was much more hopeful than the last two chapters! Absolutely wonderful. goofy ) But I am starting to wonder whether they might be forced to relocate to another planet ... maybe one with a yellow sun?

Man, are you good at setting up all these possible storylines! More, pretty please. This story is an absolute joy to read. sloppy

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“Time’s up.” Nor stepped in front of Kal and signalled to the nearest soldier. “You,” he commanded. “You are to do this.”

The soldier walked to a position ten yards from the wall where Kal stood.
Just one soldier? That was really surprising, making one soldier carry the burden. And was it a North or a South soldier? After all, Nor didn’t have enough time to weed out the bad ones. Or did he handpick them to follow him since the coup started?

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The soldier raised his rifle.
You know, I did not expect that you’d actually go through with it, but I wasn’t 100% sure that he wouldn’t still get shot. There could have been some panacea hidden away to revive him. Or it could be a fatal blow after all. Authors are known to do such things once in a while clap That wasn’t mentioned before, was it? Was she able to hide it under her potato sack?

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When Dav and his family arrived back, they would be greeted by the aroma of warm, freshly-baked puddings. As they ate, they would tell her what had transpired at the Extraordinary Report.
“And then-” Dav took another bite of his pudding. “-the soldier took aim and shot.” Another piece of pudding vanished without trace. “Good puddings today, wife. But the most curious thing happened. C4 moved after the shot was fired and the deposed Supreme Ruler still lives. So, any beverage left?”

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Dav didn’t think so. Dav said if the Regal Nobles had any feelings at all, they were certainly not expended on their wives.

But Eb couldn’t help but hope ... hope the Supreme Ruler had found someone he cared for.

Someone who cared for him.
Those three lines say so much about the life of the common folk on Krypton. And about their misconceptions about the life of nobility.

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The years of peace had mellowed her parents - so much so, they had accepted her marriage to Dav and had allowed the Northside boy to live in their home.
That line, too. The realities of a life of hardship certainly can bring the important things into focus. But can you imagine that classic scene from countless US comedies where the father welcomes his daughter’s date into his home, holding, cleaning, etc, his shotgun, getting played out in NK?

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Eb remembered the speculation that he had been kept in hiatus all the years since Krypton to guarantee his safety. She remembered the still-lingering stories that his time in hiatus had rendered him unintelligent and aloof.
Oh, so Nor tried the hiatus first, then?

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And compassion.

And a genuine desire to communicate.

A sharp rap sounded on her door, shattering the peace of the lonely farmhouse.

Eb opened the door.

And stood, face to face with the Supreme Ruler of New Krypton.
*sputters*

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He stepped back to allow his companion – the alien woman - to enter first. She closed the door and stared, dumbstruck.
Yeah, I get that. Why on Krypton would the Supreme Ruler let the woman go in first? Unless it’s a habit to make sure no booby traps were hidden inside.

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“I have been deposed as the Supreme Ruler by Lord Nor.”

Eb felt the fear and dread grip her stomach. Lord Nor. New Krypton was now ruled by a Southside despot. Dav and his family were Northside. The baby she carried would be Northside. And with Nor, there would be no mercy – of that she was sure.
Yeah, they’d probably drag the whore carrying the half-breed bastard out onto the streets to skin her alive.

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“I offered my life,” the Supreme Ruler - *former* Supreme Ruler - said. “They will be searching for me.”

A loud, angry bang shook the door. Before she had time to fully contemplate the consequences of her forwardness, Eb grabbed the Supreme Ruler’s arm and hustled him and the woman into her and Dav’s lean-to.
I think we’ve found an investigative reporter for the staff of the Daily Krypton.

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“What are they saying?”

“She said something like she is south from birth until death.”

Kal groaned.

Lois sprung from his chest. “What’s wrong?” she hissed.

His arms pulled her closer again. “That’s the Oath of the South. If she is loyal to the South, we are not safe here.”
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“This is a Northside family ... you would hide a Northside outlaw.”

“I am Southside,” Eb proclaimed with quiet pride. “My husband and brother-in-law are not here. I would not permit a Northside vagabond to enter this house while I am here alone.”
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“But you married a Northside man,” he accused with contempt.

“The marriage was forced upon me by the judgment of the Sup ... former Supreme Ruler. It was not my choice.”
I didn’t know lying was taught in kindergarten on New Krypton clap and awwww

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“I didn’t need to,” Lois said. “I can hear his limp.”
*g*

Corrina, that was an awesome part and I can’t wait to waking up tomorrow to part 30. Uh-huh. /taps foot/

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after Tek rewinds his mind to remember.
Un-Re-Set? :p

Maybe Riz has some hidden in her beverage beans?

Thanks Laura.

Ann

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But Kal and Lois have to find a way to change the Law rather gently, to reinterpret it rather than to contemptuously overthrow it. Many people on New Krypton resent the Law, of course, but others literally live their lives by it, and you can't tell them that everything they believed in was worthless from beginning to end. You can't tell them that they have lived their lives literally for nothing.
That is so true, Ann.

Rules are necessary, so unjust/bad rules need to be changed without destroying respect for all rules.

The people are set in their ways/thinking. What we see as inherently wrong (the concubine system), they see as right because that's how it has always been.

Thanks for your comments, Ann.

Artemis Thanks!

Kathy Glad you like Eb's re-appearance.

Thanks.

Sarah

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aargh! somebody get nor and get rid of him.
I'm quoting it without comment. :p

Thanks, Sarah.

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So ... Kal and Lois, hiding somewhere ...

Kal: I've been thinking, dear.
Lois: Thinking?
Kal: Maybe it's time I met the in-laws.
Lois: I'll pack the space car, Kal.

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Thanks!

HappyGirl Thanks for leaving FDK.

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It may not have been such an obvious cliffhanger
If I'd left off the last couple of lines and finished with "Someone's coming" it would have been more of a cliffhanger!

Thanks, Emma.

Kathy

Eb's reaction to Kal's smile ... I emphasised that Eb is totally in love with her husband, but even so, that smile got to her!

What Ann said.

Thanks, Kathy.

Michael

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Just one soldier? That was really surprising, making one soldier carry the burden. And was it a North or a South soldier? After all, Nor didn’t have enough time to weed out the bad ones. Or did he handpick them to follow him since the coup started?
My assumption, although I haven't really spelled it out, is that the Kryptonian soldiers are trained to absolute, instinctive obedience.

I think it would be necessary for the system to work and the Supreme Ruler to maintain total control.

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Or it could be a fatal blow after all. Authors are known to do such things once in a while
Not me.

I couldn't write 29 chapters all leading to Clark/Kal being killed.

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HappyGirl mentioned that it was Kal getting executed that caused the ruckus, but I got the impression that it was the crazy actions and physical impossibility of C4 that caused them to lose their calm.
Yes, yes and ... yes.

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Tek took this awfully calm. Same goes for materializing out of the blue. How did he arrive just in time? Or did he arrive too late and was surprised and relived that nothing had happened? And since he didn’t know of Lois abilities, how did *Tek* plan to save Kal? Probably by taking Kal into hiding after he got banished since he didn’t expect the Supreme Ruler doing something so foolish.
Tek was kept with Lois until they came to the courtyard. Once there, they let him go, figuring he could do no damage.

True. Tek didn't know Kal was going to offer his life. Any plans he had dealt with Kal being in exile.

Then mayhem broke and Tek's first thought was to get Kal out of there.

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That wasn’t mentioned before, was it? Was she able to hide it under her potato sack?
The only time we've seen Eb was from Kal's POV and I didn't think it was likely to be something mostly-pre-Lois Kal was going to notice.

Thanks, Michael


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He leant closer to Kal. “You lived a slave to your pathetic need to protect, Kal-El. How fitting that it will be the death of you.”
Honestly, I expected Nor to whisper something like "Once you are dead I will take your alien woman anyway. Supreme Ruler means that no other rules govern me."

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The world slowed.
Hello super speed!

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Eb-Ur’s life was good – very good.
Just a general comment that LOVE this whole section. clap I thought the introduction of Eb and her perspective on Kal, North vs. South and life were fabulous!

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