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Bob

I know I've read that before as a beta reader, but it struck me as especially poignant tonight in light of the disaster in Haiti.

I'm still enjoying your story, Bob. It's a unique and interesting view of the Nightfall episode. We get to see a Lois and Clark that act just a little differently than usual - Lois is more cautious and even without his memory, Clark is more assertive.

So sad that Lois' apartment was destroyed, but the offer of staying with Clark can only be a good thing. At least, my inner fangirl was squeeing and whispering "do it, do it" under my breath.

Nice work. I can't wait to see Lois start to put the pieces together about Lex. Someone needs to give Clark a picture of Luthor so he can tell Lois his gut reactions.

More soon!

You're portraying this really well, Bob

I think after this, I started to wonder whether it would be Lois' or Clark's apartment that got nuked during the night. Considering Clark has the globe at his, the memory loss, the couch, etc. it was the logical way to go

Michael

Like others have said, this is a fascinating, thought-provoking and harrowing description of what it would be like to have your city partially destroyed. The idea of finding your own apartment building destroyed is enough to give you pause:

Awful.

And Clark still has that burning sensation inside. He still has kryptonite in his system.

Imagine that he doesn't remember his own bedroom, just the fact that Lois has slept in there! I hope Lois accepts his offer to let her stay there.

Ann

My inner fangirl is squeeing too. Hey, get L&C spending the night together!

Thank you all for the comments.

I wanted to have enough damage that there was a genuine impact but not be so much that this would be an exploration of life in a post-apocalyptic world. This is a story about Lois and Clark, not the end of the world.

There is much more I’m tempted to say but I keep having to erase my notes. This is the point where I feel like if I say hardly anything then I’ve said too much.

Thanks again.

Bob

Does that mean the next chapter is ready?

(Only checking for it about 4 times a day . . . )

LOL cookiesmom! I keep coming back and checking for the next chapter multiple times each day too.

Cheers
Elizabeth

c-mom, elizabeth:

Thank you so much. You made my morning. After that, how could I delay?

Chapter 11 is up now.

Bob

Thank you! Off to read it now!

Cheers
Elizabeth

What a poignant section of the story. I'm surprised that the Daily Planet building survived as intact as it did, but not surprised that Lois' support structure was somewhat taken away. I forsee another offer from Lex in Lois' near future.


Elisabeth