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originally, i posted this over in nfic, but was kindly encouraged to post it here. i'd been thinking, as i wrote, that it had more of an nfic mood to it, but, as has been pointed out, content-wise, it's rather tame.

as i said there, this is just a small scene that all but wrote itself. once written, of course, it had to be posted.

all thoughts, comments. suggestions, constructive criticism, etc are, as always, quite welcome.

Paul

Very poignant. Packs a nice emotional punch.

WOW! A glimpse into Clark's college years and the girls he dated back then. This was great, Paul. Won't you consider writing more about this stage in Clark's life?

Very interesting, Paul. You had me scared at first that it was going to be a post-Lois deathfic sort of story, but I'm glad I kept reading. I really liked how he looked as far away as he could and his vision stopped on who we can only assume to be Lois, even though he has no idea whether being drawn to her was real or his imagination. Nicely poignant.

Kathy

Hi,

I remember reading this story and comment, but I didn't find mine. Did I dreamed?

Great piece.

MAF
PS
I remember Nfic.

From experience, I know that if no name is mentioned in the first 4 paragraphs or so, it will not turn out to be the person we expect it to be. Still, that 'Stacey' came like a ton of bricks on my head. But nicely hinting on Lois's whereabouts and on the future, and really, really, emotionally revealing.


Julie

Your warning had me expecting a Tank ending of sorts, but the twist was quite a surprise.

I liked this little painful glimpse at some of Clark's struggles during what I assume was his college years. Kudos for not making the woman in question Lana! I think we can safely assume he met at least one *other* woman besides Lana before meeting Lois.

Very poignant, as others have said. Thanks for sharing.

Hazel

Paul,

I had the same feelings as Kathy, but it was so beautifully written that it kept my attention and I'm glad I stayed with it.

A nice look at Clark's values and his hopes.

Loved it.

Barb.

Nice little story.

You show us a Clark who is trying to 'fit in' but just can't get past his 'differences' which make him feel his loneliness even more than would someone else at that early age.

Usually college age kids are too busy to realize that they're lonely even if they don't have much of a social life.

Cute touch at the end with his 'vision gizmo' seeming to seek out and find that special someone even if he doesn't know that it is she.

Tank (who thinks Paul needs to turn his twisted mental energies toward an evil little Halloween vignette)

thanks for your comments, everyone.

rivka, i'm glad the story worked for you. thanks for letting me know.

ursie, thank you, but i'm sorry to say i don't have any plans for more stories in this time period. you never know, i guess, but it doesn't seem likely.

kathy, thanks for sticking with the story. i'm glad you did. as for him looking out, that was a last-minute addition. i just couldn't leave things without a glimpse of hope. i'm glad you liked it. i was afraid it would be a little too corny.

maria, sorry for the confusion. glad you figured it out. and thanks for writing again.

julie, yeah, i figured the lack of names would tip off at least some readers, but i didn't see any other way. it's good to know it was still effective.

hazel, yes, it's college years. i didn't want to make that clear early, for obvious reasons, but i did hope that later clues (like the use of the word "campus") would be enough.

as for lana, i'm happy to say she never even crossed my mind. thinking about it, she just doesn't seem right. i think this one needed a purer backstory, untainted by folc's innate dislike of her.

barb, yes, that's exactly what i was going for. thanks.

tank, i hadn't really been thinking of clark's powers, per se, but you're right, they do isolate him more.

i'm glad to hear, though, that the vision trick worked for you, too. like i said, i was a bit worried about it, but if it worked for you as well as kathy, that makes me feel a lot better about it.

also, thanks for suggesting i do a halloween fic. i hadn't even considered it until you mentioned.

man, it feels good to be able to write again!

thanks again, everyone, for your comments.

Paul