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I was having a conversation in Mirc with Laura and Peggy and Chris which inspired this. Let me know what you think!
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I like it. The show version always annoyed me on this. Clark fought for years to control his powers and the Kryptonians waltz in and have everything immediately under control. 
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Very true - Clark had a lifetime to grow into his powers, Nor and co. took about five minutes. Of course Ultra-Woman, Resplendent Man, and that kid who got a weak dose of Clark's power did so too, so at least they're being consistently stupid.
If you want an even sillier example, the whole thing with Zod and co in Superman II should never have happened. They exited the Phantom Zone in deep space, with no opportunity to charge their powers first, and should have died a few seconds later.
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Forgotten Futures, The Scientific Romance Role Playing Game
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I love it!  Joy, Lynn
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yes - this makes so much more sense. Nicely done, Shayne.  carol
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 So very awesome. The irony of their dense molecular structure sending them into orbit with a casual step is so very satisfying, as was seeing Nor and his men brought to their knees by super hearing. The only thing that would have been funnier would have been if Nor couldn't utter a word without the fear of freezing everything around him. Too bad about Smallville and the heat vision devastation. Maybe Superman will help them rebuild. It's really nice to see another story from you, Shayne. Thank you for the NK arc untwist. BJ
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I liked it! I like the irony in having their very "super abilities" be what did them in. And I like the poetic justice in having a group of people so sure of their superiority fail in such an undignified and humiliating way.
"Hold on, my friends, to the Constitution and to the Republic for which it stands. Miracles do not cluster and what has happened once in 6,000 years, may not happen again. Hold on to the Constitution" - Daniel Webster
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Clever, and very satisfying.
Tank (who is consistently amazed at the original twists and premises that Shayne comes up with)
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Hate to repeat what others have said, but that was very clever! I like your explanation as to why Zara and Ching appeared to have no issues.
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I second what everyone else said! And loved the ending: Sometimes, though, it was all about control. He turned to Lois and smiled, leaning down for a kiss.
His touch was as delicate as a butterfly’s wing. Clark's restrained strength is one of the many things that make him so sexy! BTW, I've read Veritas twice -- fantastic tale! Definitely one of my favorites on the archive! 
Reach for the moon, for even if you fail, you'll still land among the stars... and who knows? Maybe you'll meet Superman along the way. 
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How it should have been! LOL, this is much more logical than the storyline on the show. Great job, Shayne. Very clever! (And the final line was the perfect ending. ) Kathy
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“It did,” Zara said. “We landed in Canada, and there’s a bald spot in the forest up there three miles wide from where we made some…mistakes.” LOL. If a Kryptonian goes out of control in the Canadian wilds, will anyone notice? (No offense to our Canadian friends is intended, I just found this amusing.) Very cute and very reasonable, Shayne!  Artemis
History is easy once you've lived it. - Duncan MacLeod
Writing history is easy once you've lived it. - Artemis
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Books may look like nothing more than words on a page, but they are actually an infinitely complex imaginotransference technology that translates odd, inky squiggles into pictures inside your head.
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Very interesting! I liked it!
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
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Very satisfying indeed. Wouldn't that have been a great twist.
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That was lovely. And welcome back, Shayne.
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That was a great untwist. And the others are right. The last paragraph offers perfect symmetry Michael
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My, this is one of the best short tales of the last few months. *laughs again*
*wipes tears from eyes*
Priceless!
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Best alternate end for Nor I've ever read! And ditto many others regarding a wonderful final line in this!! Thank you
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