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I like the premise! An already established relationship with Lex, and no Clark Kent in sight (yet!)!
Re Lex: Why do I think that is a HUGE mistake?

Really intrigued where you'll take this! Will Lois begin investigating a Clark Kent before she actually meets him? And since he didn't make his debut as Superman at Eprad, where is he??

Got me hooked! Bring it on!


Errata I spotted, since you asked:
should be 'metal' not 'medal'

Intriguing start. It will be fun to see how you develop this.

Joan

Really good start. So far it seems we are seeing things as canon would have progressed without Clark. I assume you are going to leave Clark out for all of first season? Maybe have the folks on Space Station Luthor attempt to stop Nightfall and appear to be mostly successful?

I can picture Lex offering Lois a place in his underground ark and being turned down. He bobbles up as he know the attempts by Space Station Luthor will fail. While bobbled up Clark stops Nightfall without revealing himself, although the Space Station Luthor folks and people like Bernie Klein know someone/thing must have helped them.

With Luthor bobbled up Lois is able to unravel the threads of the Boss's criminal empire, it helps that Intergang is moving in and chaos is the order of the day in the formerly well controlled criminal elements of Metropolis.

Meanwhile we still don't see Clark? Or perhaps we see Clark elsewhere on the Planet? Still searching for a place he fits?

OK, considering the length of some of you tales that is saying something. Looking forward to it. I've enjoyed all your other tales.


As you know I tend towards nit picks. So this is about one line at the beginning.

Oops the moon has no atmosphere.

May I suggest you simply use the L4 or L5 point?
Thus the line would read
"Most recently there had been an attempt to build a station at the Lagrange Five point."

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Great start! I'm just waiting for Clark to come into the picture. Where is he, anyway?

I had to quibble about the moon's (lack of) atmosphere too. Although this does remind me of the old joke:

Q: Did you hear about the new restaurant on the Moon?
A. Yeah, it's got great food, but no atmosphere.

Wow, that's a lot of dates! It works out to about three dates a week. Is Lois spending every other evening with Luthor? Does she still know so little about him? (Of course, I'm sure that Lex is very good at deflecting questions and concealing his real personality.)

Why is Lex dating her in this reality? She's not "Superman's girlfriend" yet. Is he dating her just to keep an eye on her? Is she interfering with his crime activities?

Again, I'm waiting for Clark to show up. And what's going to happen with the space station? What about the kryptonite? I'm sure that will be signficant later. What will STAR Labs find out about the globe? Will Lois go back to get the ship once she finds the globe is an alien artifact? Will the spaceship "disappear" like it did in TV canon? (They never did say what happened to it on the show, as I recall.)

I'm really glad that you're promising us a *long* fic. Yay! Yay! Yay!

Now get out there and post more soon!

Hmm, I like this start, and I have a very good guess as to the scientist's identity. I bet he won't fall over with joy when he gets to see the green rock, although fall over he might.

I like this premise too!

Where is Clark Kent? And Lois wanting to examine Lex's intentions - bad idea!

If you can manage this, then I would (and it would be great to have something else to read in those day while we are waiting for Corrina to post)!

Looking forward to see where you are going with this (and another long fic from you is just perfect).

Where's Clark? Dead, or traveling the world?

You have no idea!

Hmmm... that would be interesting.

Patrick, you seem to love the Nightfall premise! The only thing I can tell you about Nightfall in this story is .

Thanks you guys for pointing that out. When I'd originally written this I was thinking: 'right out the Earth's atmosphere and close to the moon'. And when I wrote it, look what I got!

And I'm glad to see no one has a problem with this being a long fic.

Thanks for reading and for posting such great feedback.

SQD(who's hoping she'll survive the next few parts )

We need both! That would be awesome!