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I'd love to hear what you think of this. I have the idea of doing five of these stories, each taking a different sense, and calling them, altogether, 'I Sense That I Love You.' But if there's not enough here to warrant more of the same, just let me know.

Thanks!

Aw! That got me a little misty eyed, I have to admit. LOVED it!! I especially liked Lois in her wedding gown before her wedding to Lex thinking about the '3' men in her life and how they would react to her crying. Well done!!

And I definitely think you can pull off a series of the senses-- I say, go for it!

That was really sweet. I loved how you showed Lois remembering back to the wedding with Lex and realizing through the sense of touch what Clark meant to her.

I hope you continue your series of senses.

Aww that was great! So sweet!

That was wonderful! Please write more.

Beautiful story! I love the idea of a separate vinette for each of the sense. I've always liked the idea that our brains sometimes distract us from what we instinctively grasp. I love the distinctions you provide for us with Lois' feelings regarding Lex, Superman and Clark.

Joan

This is great! I also loved the thoughts going through Lois's mind while looking at herself in the mirror before her and Lex's wedding.

You've really captured the differences between her relationships with the three main men in her life.

I hope you include music in the hearing sense... like when Lois & Clark dance for the first time. I was wondering why you didn't use that 'touch' here. Or that first kiss, but now I'm guessing you're saving those for other senses. Taste, perhaps?

This really was beautiful!

I also think that you can pull of the whole five senses-story thing



Oh, almost forgot ... loved how Lois thought back to her almost wedding to Lex and reflected on how each three men would have behaved with her crying.

Well done!

I especially like the part with Lois contemplating how the men would respond to her crying.

There are very few people whom I think could pull off a 'senses series', but you are definitely one of them! Go for it.

Joy,
Lynn

Wow! That was really well done. I loved it!

That was a really nice story. Yes, go for the senses series!

Artemis

sweet fluff to end the day.

I say go for it on the other stories, as I can't wait to read them.

I agree with everyone else that you should definitely continue the "senses" series. This was very well-written and very moving.

That was really very sweet.Nice job!

Oh wow, this was amazing!! LOVED IT! I was sad to see it end but enjoyed every word of it.

Thanks for all the enthusiastic replies!

I admit I wasn’t sure about this, but now that I’ve gotten all your hopes up, I’ll definitely write the rest. I do have the second one almost done (it just needs another editing go, which I always put off; writing is so much funner than REwriting), and I’ve started the third.

Lynn S M, I thank you for the compliment, though I hope it doesn’t mean you think I ramble all the time.

VirginiaR, I can’t promise music, but I hope you like what I have planned anyway. There’s just so much that can be explored through eighty-eight episodes that it’s impossible to catch everyone’s favorites! Maybe next time.

Again, thanks to everyone for taking the time to tell me what you thought.

Oh, AK, this is really good! The beginning had me smiling because it was just so sweet and happy and clever. I love the descriptions of the times Lois had touched him in those early days, and how she couldn't figure out why everyone thought they were a couple when they considered themselves "just friends". (You just know that's what everyone talked about over the water cooler in early S2!)

But then you got to this:
And it was kind of like the needle scratched to a halt on the record. (Yeah, old analogy; just go with me. )

This is actually pretty profound, that she was thinking this, and it elevated this vignette from a cute piece of fluff to something more. Very nicely done!

Love it. Great job.

Kathy

Thanks, KathyB! I'm glad you found it profound, and here I was thinking it wasn't anything new. (Oh, and I listened to records when I was a kid, so I thought the analogy was perfect.)

So glad you enjoyed, and thanks for commenting!

I loved it! I know I read them in the wrong order but I like this one better than Second Sight. I think you captured Lois's voice perfectly!

Good job, keep it up!

AnnaBtG.

Okay - so ignore my last comment on Clark's side asking for Lois' side. You've already given it to us!

Nicely written. I love the 20/20 hindsight that Lois has here. Part of my wishes that you'd touched on that first touch when Lois realises that Clark and Superman are one and the same. The greater part of me realises that that moment really doesn't fit into this story - Lois loves Clark for Clark, not for his super side. Favorite lines include: