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Figured I'd post this since I think several of you might hire guys who know guys to come after me if I don't. More at the end of the week.
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Boo-yah! I'm on top of it this round and actually ahead! What up? :p He was painfully aware of his appearance. Every eye on the planet would be fixed on him and on his soon to be wife; if not in person, then on every video monitor in every public place and private home. Didn't even consider this aspect. It makes sense- look at all the hubabaloo (is that spelled right? I don't think so...) over the royal wedding in England just this last year. Just try not to look so depressed. Everyone expects this to be a happy occasion." Ooh! I can just imagine the two love birds getting into a fight in front of practically the entire population of Krypton. "Might I have a word with your brother in private?" he asked. Tips for the wedding night? He gave her a shy smile but before he could speak a word, his brothers converged on them. Kal sighed inwardly. Normally he'd be happy to be rescued from a moment like this, but now, it felt more like an intrusion.
"Kal! Congrats, bro!" Jai said, reaching him first. He drew Kal into a back-slapping hug. It seems that Jimmy Interruptus is a liable threat in any universe. You'll be seeing a lot of them, now that we're...family. Awkward... He wanted desperately to have a moment alone with Lois. But fate, it seemed, had other plans. /sighs/ It always does. "I, uh...would you mind walking beside me?"
"That...wouldn't be proper. Tradition clearly states..."
"Hang tradition," Kal said, smiling gently. "You are my wife now. I will not have you treated as if you are beneath me." Score one for Kal. Lois was stripping out of her robes. She paused and swallowed hard, facing Kal, and let the material pool around her ankles.
"Wh...what are you doing?" Kal asked. He tried not to stare and averted his eyes. He toed the carpet of the room self-consciously. What a way to break the ice. Lois cut him off, her brown eyes flashing with anger. "You thought what? That you'd buy my affections? That you'd make one gesture and I'd fall into your arms? Well, you've got another thing coming. The only reason I am here is that I had no other choice." Burn! Lois nodded. "And just because we've been forced into a marriage doesn't mean that I have to like it. My father might be thrilled with this match, but I'm not. If it were up to me, I'd be off doing my own thing. I'd rather be a working commoner then a princess stuck in a marriage with you. So you can just keep your little gift. I will not be bought!" Score one for Lois! He'd meant the gift to be a gesture of his good will and his willingness to give this marriage a fighting chance. How had the tables turned on him so quickly? It seems Kal has just become acquainted with the Mad Dog. Kal lay on the couch on his back. Fasa jumped up and lay on his chest. Hot tears of sadness and frustration pricked at Kal's eyes. He fought them back and stroked the cat's back. Though he was exhausted, Kal found sleep to be elusive for a long while. Poor Clark- and poor Lois. Neither of them really deserve this. They shouldn't lash out at each other. And at the image of the Kal stroking the cat- for some reason it just gives me the image of the Bond villain Blofeild... which in turn only makes me think of Dr. Evil in Austin Powers... and at that point I'm laughing so hard I'm practically crying. Great chapter! Really glad to finally meet Lois, and I hope all of our demands from the last session of FDK aren't putting you behind on finishing this up. I shall be patient as long as I can bear it... but patience is not necessarily a virtue I possess. Just sayin'.
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Oh, Poor Kal. He's married a... a... I can't think of the correct words to describe Lois's first words and actions to Clark. But "sweet" isn't among them. Oh, dear. Oh, dear. Oh, dear. It's going to be a long life for Kal. I had such high hopes too. Sigh. Kal was finally acting like a gentleman, trying to do the decent thing, letting his Clark show. I found him to be kind and sweet despite the circumstances that threw them together. Of course he fell in love with Lois at first sight. And then to receive a back hand across his face when he presented her with his gift, well... it was probably his fault... if only unintentionally. He made two mistakes. Two - very major - mistakes. (Forgiveable mistakes, since what does the poor lunkhead really know about women?) First, when he finally was able to say something in private to Lois... he implied a regular wedding night with these words: "After dessert, I think we'll be able to slip out of here, if you'd like to." What he *should* have said was: "After dessert, I think we'll be able to slip out of here and talk, if you like." How was Lois to know that he wanted to talk to her first? What does she know of men, other than her father and what her mother (Elle!) has told her? Little or nothing, I expect. So, of course, when they arrived to his chambers (what? No Wedding suite? No honeymoon?) and he rushed off to change into his pjs (his *second* mistake), what else was she supposed to think? So, of course, she did what her mother probably told her would be expected of her, she got undressed. And then he returned and rejected her... no woman wants that... especially on their wedding night. I completely understand that Lois would be angry after all that. And now, my conjecture about Pooooor Lois. Poor Kal! "What are you doing?" Lois demanded. What? You said you couldn't be bought? You practically beanned him with his goodwill gift. Did you expect that he'd interpret that to mean you'd give it away for free? That he'd fall at your feet begging you to let him have his way with you? Or did you expect that he'd just do that anyway, no matter your opinion? "You can take the bed," Kal said, disgusted by the turn of events. "I'm going to go sleep on the couch. Come, Fasa." Ouch, Kal! Not even leaving her the cat. That's harsh! Oh, dear, it looks like you married a nice and proper gentleman after all, Lois. Too bad you didn't know about those kind of men before you got married, isn't it? Gee, thanks, Dad(s). This will make for one happy marriage. Oh, dear. Oh, dear. Oh, dear. What will happen next???? Biting my fingernails (figuratively) in anticipation. How about each time you finish a part and send it to Beta, you post a new part? or every Thursday - whichever comes first? Then you'll still be that much ahead of the rest of us. EDIT: In case you didn't notice, I'm liking your story.
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Boo-yah! I'm on top of it this round and actually ahead! What up? Hi Mouse! I do believe that gives you the right to post an annoying "FIRST!!!!!!!" comment. Didn't even consider this aspect. It makes sense- look at all the hubabaloo (is that spelled right? I don't think so...) over the royal wedding in England just this last year. Very true. And Clark hates being in the spotlight. Ooh! I can just imagine the two love birds getting into a fight in front of practically the entire population of Krypton. It seems that Jimmy Interruptus is a liable threat in any universe. Pretty much. <hands out official score sheets> What a way to break the ice. Ice? What ice? It seems Kal has just become acquainted with the Mad Dog. And she's foaming at the mouth. Poor Clark- and poor Lois. Neither of them really deserve this. They shouldn't lash out at each other. Very true. And at the image of the Kal stroking the cat- for some reason it just gives me the image of the Bond villain Blofeild... which in turn only makes me think of Dr. Evil in Austin Powers... and at that point I'm laughing so hard I'm practically crying. Quarter after 3am here, and I am wiping tears out of my eyes as I laugh so hard. Great chapter! Really glad to finally meet Lois, and I hope all of our demands from the last session of FDK aren't putting you behind on finishing this up. I shall be patient as long as I can bear it... but patience is not necessarily a virtue I possess. Just sayin'. Eh, it didn't put me *too* far behind. I did manage to get about a page done for chapter 18. Thanks for stopping in!
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Oooh! Virginia is here...and with super-long feedback! Oh, Poor Kal. He's married a... a... I can't think of the correct words to describe Lois's first words and actions to Clark. But "sweet" isn't among them. Oh, dear. Oh, dear. Oh, dear. It's going to be a long life for Kal. Oh, dear. Oh, dear. Oh, dear. What will happen next???? Biting my fingernails (figuratively) in anticipation. Nothing good? How about each time you finish a part and send it to Beta, you post a new part? or every Thursday - whichever comes first? Then you'll still be that much ahead of the rest of us. I'm contemplating Sunday/Thursday...but hey, if you want every Thurday... EDIT: In case you didn't notice, I'm liking your story. I'm glad! I am really enjoying your feedback.
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I knew we could reach an agreement. (Translation: Thanks for posting early!) For several days now, the prince had been on edge. He could barely sleep. And when he did, his dreams were fitful and dark. It left him somehow more exhausted than when he'd initially laid down to sleep. He found himself able to eat even less than he was able to sleep. His stomach roiled and lurched each time he sat down to eat. I wonder if it's just wedding jitters or something more sinister, maybe something to do with Lex - uh, I mean Lux? (Why Lux, which is Latin for light?) "Let Lois see me as I am," he mumbled to himself. "She deserves better than to be lied to in any way on this day." Still pondering his situation, Kal finished changing and reentered the bedroom. Lois was stripping out of her robes. She paused and swallowed hard, facing Kal, and let the material pool around her ankles.
"Wh...what are you doing?" Kal asked. He tried not to stare and averted his eyes. He toed the carpet of the room self-consciously.
"I...thought...you'd want to take what is rightfully yours." Ouch. Kal shook his head. "No. Please, get dressed."
"Am I not pleasing to you, my lord?" More ouch. They really raised her on crap. Kal shook his head again. "It's not that. You're beautiful. In fact, I've never seen anyone as beautiful as you."
"Then I'm afraid I don't understand." Still, Lois bent and pulled the robes around her body once more.
"Look, Lois, you don't...belong...to me, or to anyone. It wouldn't be right for me to just...take...what you're offering. I'd like it if we got to know each other though. Here...I have something that I'd like to give you." It's a good thing he's a good guy. No, make that a great guy. Lois cut him off, her brown eyes flashing with anger. "You thought what? That you'd buy my affections? That you'd make one gesture and I'd fall into your arms? Well, you've got another thing coming. The only reason I am here is that I had no other choice."
"Lois, neither one of us had a choice in this."
Lois nodded. "And just because we've been forced into a marriage doesn't mean that I have to like it. My father might be thrilled with this match, but I'm not. If it were up to me, I'd be off doing my own thing. I'd rather be a working commoner then a princess stuck in a marriage with you. So you can just keep your little gift. I will not be bought!" Lois as we know her. Poor Kal, though. I dare say that's not the reaction he expected. He placed the box on the top of his dresser and shook his head. He went to his closet and pulled out an extra blanket and pillow.
"What are you doing?" Lois demanded.
"You can take the bed," Kal said, disgusted by the turn of events. "I'm going to go sleep on the couch. Come, Fasa." The logical conclusion for someone with common sense. However, Lois wasn't raised to believe in common sense... I wonder what she's going to make out of it. Rejection on his part? Reading on... Wait, that's it? You can't just stop here! I mean, hey, that's just pure evil!
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I knew we could reach an agreement. (Translation: Thanks for posting early!) You're welcome. Now, about those thugs staring at me and hefting night sticks... I wonder if it's just wedding jitters or something more sinister, maybe something to do with Lex - uh, I mean Lux? (Why Lux, which is Latin for light?) Umm...mostly because lazy writer brain couldn't come up with anything better? Good boy! He's already learning how to be a good husband. Just... will Lois appreciate it? Off to read more. He *can* be taught! Good advice from someone who's been there, done that. (Especially the "don't look so depressed" part) What? "Don't look so depressed" isn't standard wedding day advice? Lol. Remeinds me of dancing lessons. "Smile! Dancing is fun!" is what my instructor used to tell us pretty much every lesson. *giggles* Too cute. Like a teenager before his first date. Only without acne! Notice the absence of the noun "bed" in there? Also, the wedding vows do not contain anything about fidelity. Wonder if it's going to be the same for Lois? (My money is on "not".) Bingo. Since, well, Kal can't get pregnant and all. Why am I not surprised? If that's the official wedding vows for all people, Lois' mother sure failed with hers, as did Lara. (She never had a daughter, did she?) Then do something about it, dammit! Offer her your arm or something! Too shy, too painfully aware of protocol. What I was afraid of: Lois seems to be raised to honor even the silliest piece of protocol so she would not shame her father (any more than she did by being a girl in the first place). No wonder she's not happy. But, once again, the House of El men seem to know exactly what to say. Well, observe in public anyway... The El men are good people though. God, this guy is way too passive. Just too polite for his own good. More ouch. They really raised her on crap. Force fed it to her. Lois as we know her. Poor Kal, though. I dare say that's not the reaction he expected. Not in the least! The logical conclusion for someone with common sense. However, Lois wasn't raised to believe in common sense... I wonder what she's going to make out of it. Rejection on his part? Reading on... Bingo. it, that's it? You can't just stop here! I mean, hey, that's just pure evil! Sorry! More to come soon, I promise!
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I wonder if it's just wedding jitters or something more sinister, maybe something to do with Lex - uh, I mean Lux? (Why Lux, which is Latin for light?) Umm...mostly because lazy writer brain couldn't come up with anything better? Personally, I'd have called him Lex-Or... :p What? "Don't look so depressed" isn't standard wedding day advice? How would I know? I'm not married... Aside from the fact that Kal's marriage will start off more depressing than a funeral? Bingo! And much more satisfying in the long run, if you don't bleed to death before reaching it. True, but that's a big "if". (Besides, it's much more fun to read.) Bingo. Since, well, Kal can't get pregnant and all. No, all he could do is sire little half princes. (Why does that always remind me of The Half-Blood Prince?) Then do something about it, dammit! Offer her your arm or something! Too shy, too painfully aware of protocol. What happened to "Hang tradition"? Just hang protocol by its side! </font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">
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Everyone is saying the same thing - poor Kal! Yes it is a terrible thing to be sold into marriage with a person you do not meet until the wedding day. I have questions of course. Jor seems petty and mean knowing what this is doing to his son. His words at the end were pretty weak. An apology might have gone a long way! Another thing. Why did Jor wait so long before telling Kal? At least the young man might have had time to get used to the idea of sharing his life with a complete stranger no matter how beautiful she is! Love the cat! That's our Lois! At first in the 'wedding chamber' she seemed so complying and willing, but than WHAM! Mad Dog Lyne appears and won't allow herself to be this prince's plaything - no matter how handsome he is! So I look forward to seeing how this entire situation is resolved. This is a great fic so far!
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How would I know? I'm not married... I wouldn't know either. I had to stop myself from running down the aisle to the altar. True, but that's a big "if". (Besides, it's much more fun to read.) Precisely! <feverishly preps more chapters for AntiK to beta> My guess is that Lois actually made it. Her secret career, which she had to kill. Thus, the "offical" death of the maker of that pendant. (And thereby reminding her of what she has lost, further fueling her anger and frustration.) Really not though. She just *wanted* to be free to choose her own path - her own career and husband. But heck, what a twist that would have been if she'd been the one to make that necklace!!!
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Hi Morgana! Everyone is saying the same thing - poor Kal! Yes it is a terrible thing to be sold into marriage with a person you do not meet until the wedding day. Yup. Poor Lois and Kal both! I have questions of course. I have answers! :p Jor seems petty and mean knowing what this is doing to his son. His words at the end were pretty weak. An apology might have gone a long way! Another thing. Why did Jor wait so long before telling Kal? At least the young man might have had time to get used to the idea of sharing his life with a complete stranger no matter how beautiful she is! Severe guilt for having traded his son's life like that. Also, he knows how headstrong Kal is and fears that he would have done something rash, like try to run away from home and become a farmer or something. Thanks! He's based (mostly) on my own tabby, Mufasa. (Except for the cat's backstory, which makes a brief appearance in a totally not weird way.) That's our Lois! At first in the 'wedding chamber' she seemed so complying and willing, but than WHAM! Mad Dog Lyne appears and won't allow herself to be this prince's plaything - no matter how handsome he is! "Oh? I *don't* have to conform to tradition...well then, screw this and you!" So I look forward to seeing how this entire situation is resolved. This is a great fic so far! Thank you! More coming probably around Thursday!
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Wow that was a surprise, but I can't say I blame her. Though I'd like to know what she thinks of him at least. Laura
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Originally posted by Laurach: Wow that was a surprise, but I can't say I blame her. Though I'd like to know what she thinks of him at least. Laura Oh, don't worry. You'll get a peek inside of Lois' head in a few chapters.
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First off, I’m terribly scared to post after Virginia’s FDK. That was just /imagines Lois thinking that the little princling didn’t even care to straighten out for their wedding day/ . "I, Kal, of the house of El, hereby do solemnly pledge myself to thee, Lois, of the house of Lyne. From this moment, henceforth, until my dying day, I commit myself to you as your husband. Hope they have a stock supply of dishes and vases to re-supply the prince’s rooms. He just couldn't bring himself to lay with a complete stranger. But what would Lois think? Would it be a relief to her as well? Well, to Lucrecia Borgia, it was a way out. Given how her husband was unable to perform his marital duties to her. "Is she not attractive though?" his father asked knowingly.
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"After dessert, I think we'll be able to slip out of here, if you'd like to." Handing her the bedding so she can take the couch? "You can take the bed," Kal said, disgusted by the turn of events. Though he was exhausted, Kal found sleep to be elusive for a long while.
To Be Continued... So, are we going to get Lois’s POV next? Or will we see her again when she pours cold water over his face? Oh, and is it Thursday already? And no, those black SUVs are not following you. Michael
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Awww! Poor Kal! Lois should be happy he's not a 'take what's rightfully his' type of guy!
Lovely part! I'm a little behind on reading it, but it certainly was splendid!
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Originally posted by Darth Michael: <strong> First off, I’m terribly scared to post after Virginia’s FDK. That was just /Pst., Michael, </font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif"> I'm contemplating Sunday/Thursday...but hey, if you want every Thurday... No, no, DC. Don't listen to me. Thurs and Sunday is just fine.
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Originally posted by Deadly Chakram: I do believe that gives you the right to post an annoying "FIRST!!!!!!!" comment. You said it, not me, so... FIRST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Like in "My Big Fat Greek Wedding?" Goody! Kallie throws the best tea parties... and something suddenly clicks in Lois' mind about just why their wedding night went so wrong... hands out official score sheets Oooh! I'm going to get on that! Special Lois and Clark score sheets, here I come! (Seriously. I'm gonna do that. )
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-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Then I'm afraid I don't understand." Still, Lois bent and pulled the robes around her body once more. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------
“You see. I meant ‘beautiful’ as in aesthetically pleasing, not sexually attractive. I much prefer the services of the male care givers we employ.” /spews water everywhere, curses under breath as I now have to dry my textbook off/ Micahel, you are brilliant.
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I am really enjoying this story. I am anxious to see how the relationship develops. Will they develop a friendship first while trying to solve some mystery? Looking forward to the next part. K www.sales-training-for-business.com
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