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Okay, guys, the black SUV people followed me to the local Chinese food place this afternoon when I went to pick up lunch. I got threatened with a pint of shrimp lo mein! This is slowly morphing into a Wednesday/Saturday posting schedule, isn't it?
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Never mind the new schedule. I don't quite know yet what to make of today's chapter, it's certainly interesting - only I can't believe that Kal's victory will be without dire consequences. The Uthor family is not known for taking defeat honorably, is it? (Also, I have no idea who that Dr. K'lin is supposed to be, but did I read right and you got Bruce Wayne into your story? )
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Also, I have no idea who that Dr. K'lin is supposed to be The kryptonian version of Dr. Bernard Klein. did I read right and you got Bruce Wayne into your story? Ruce A'ne, also known as Krypto Bat. Super Kal won without even practicing. Kudos to him. But surely Nor won't accept defeat graciously... Andreia
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Their prince had won the fight. Yaaay.... though somehow I feel this won't be the last we hear from Lord Nor....
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I recognized B. Klein, but missed Bruce-baby. Although I thought I should be recognizing him. I hope he helps Kal and Lois solve the mystery about the missing women from the house of Uthor. Nor Uthor! There's a scary combination of forces. "I guess...we've both done things in our lives for our fathers," Lois said. "Even though they haven't been what we would have chosen for ourselves." "I hear on Earth, they don't do that. We should have run away together when we could, Kal." "My father has always wanted to see one of his sons win," he said with a sigh. "But none of us ever has. He's not ashamed of it. But I think, deep down, it is still a little disappointing. It's like he wants to relive the glory of it through us." My gosh! Jor-El was captain of the football... er.... drei team and he ended up a serious scholar, a playboy, and peace-advocate for sons. No wonder they disappoint him. AND no grandchildren! What had he done wrong as a father? To distract him, she pulled him into a fierce kiss. Kissing is good. I guess it works both ways. He kisses her to stop her from babbling, she kisses him when he's stressed. Time stood still and all thought ceased to exist. There was only them. Sky and ground, sun and wind - everything vanished. There was no reality but their kiss. Nothing else held any meaning. When they eventually parted, they both felt as though a roaring wildfire was surging through their bodies. Oh, la, la. Nice kiss. That very night, they finally united fully as husband and wife.
The next day dawned bright and fair. <<cough, cough>> Um... DC... missing something from your story there?? LIKE a WHOLE POSTING PART or at least a paragraph... or something? Reaction? Thoughts? A dance? A high-five with Jai? SOMETHING? <<cough>> Didn't Kal say something about not wanting to tire himself out before the big match? /Pst. Michael, I was wrong. IMG do count towards the Graemlin total. <<smacks own face, since I'm out of smilies>>/
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FDK - Part 2 Let's see where was I? Right... Now, back to you story.... ... So, no romance in this part, huh. Hmmm. And here, I was hoping the battle in the title part might refer to a banterfest. Darn. You meant a REAL battle. Thus enters A-Plot. "Do we really have to go?" Lois asked, her voice more a sigh than anything. I'm with Lois here. Let's skip the battle and stay in bed! "Imagine the scandal if people realize!" Lois teased him in mock horror. What? That it took Kal 6 months to consumate his marriage? Yep! "He's ruthless and cold-hearted," Zara put in. "I don't think he's ever faced an opponent yet that he hasn't hurt in some way."
"And he's allowed to continue fighting?" Lois asked, truly horrified.
Kal nodded. "It's all part of the risk taken when you step out onto the field." My, Samm really did sequester his girls. Nice sport. So, Rao is a bloodthirsty god? Kal sighed. "In the past ten years or so, two of the Uthor household servants and six concubines have gone missing. Nor has a terrible temper and a short fuse. We think that he may have..."
"...killed them?" Lois finished for him. And it might not have anything to do with Nor, it could have been Lux. I mean, the man's wife DID die. "Can't you do something?" Lois asked, aghast.
Ching shook his head. "How? We have no evidence to prove any wrong-doing." Yep, I'm guessing no search warrents allowed on Krypton, either. "My lords and ladies, may I direct your attention to the Supreme Lord, our most beloved Jor-El?" Really? "Most beloved Jor-El"? Really? She got her wish when the last pairing of the day was announced. Since none of the El family had been called to fight, Kal and Lois were able to slip away. What? This event goes on for another day? No wonder this world explodes. If honor had allowed for it, he would gladly have taken a dive in one of the rounds to escape further fights. <<Shock>> KAL! The week dragged on. Each day passed in the same way. Kal and his brothers were now called to fight daily, sometimes more than once. Jai was knocked out in his third round. Ching made it seven rounds, but was ultimately defeated by a young lord named Ruce A'ne, a close friend of the El family, and the second richest man on the planet. Week? So totally missed this reference to Bruce! I knew he must be someone, but couldn't figure out who. Eventually, on the final day of the tournament, only two fighters remained. Kal-El, prince of Krypton, and Lord Nor, son of Lux Uthor. Oh, this isn't going to be good. Kal, you should have waited to consumate your marriage. Don't you know virgins NEVER die in horror movies? Of course, on the other hand, did he really want to die a virgin? Probably not. "I'll be fine," he said, giving her a smile and a reassuring squeeze on the shoulder.
Her hand flew up to cup his cheek. "Promise?"
"Promise." <<Shock>> Kal, you're lying to the Mrs.! It smashed into Nor's inner thigh, close to his groin. A look of pain crossed the young lord's features and the drei fell from his nerveless fingers. He crumpled to the ground. Kal jumped to his feet, quickly struck Nor in the chest, and laid the man out on his back. With a swift kick, he sent the drei out of the man's reach, then planted the end of his own weapon in the middle of Nor's chest. Around the two fighters, the onlookers exploded into cheers. Okay, a groin shot. What does it take to be disqualified from this event anyway? For a fighter to KILL someone? That seems a little extreme, before intervention. Neither Nor or Lux are going to be happy with this, you know that, right? They are going to say Kal cheated. And enact vengence. And if you're going to tick off some noble family the Uthor family aren't the ones to anger, right? Their prince had won the fight. Let me guess. It's going to be contested by the Uthor family and a rematch will be demanded? A rematch where Nor cheats? Or tries to kill Kal? Or kidnaps Lois and holds her hostage until Kal makes a dive? And of course, Daddy dearest (that would be Jor-El Daddy) is going to say, "Nice job, son. It doesn't really count since you hit him in the crotch though." Ooooh. I see evilness ahead in this story. Time for a romantic interlude as Lois nurses Kal back to health? I don't have any black SUVs but I do still have that guy with the ax (from the top of the post) on payroll. And a box of tomatoes is arriving soon. So, ROMANCTIC INTERLUDE?
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Originally posted by Lara Joelle Kent: Never mind the new schedule.
I don't quite know yet what to make of today's chapter, it's certainly interesting - only I can't believe that Kal's victory will be without dire consequences. The Uthor family is not known for taking defeat honorably, is it?
(Also, I have no idea who that Dr. K'lin is supposed to be, but did I read right and you got Bruce Wayne into your story? ) Hi, Lara! Dr. Bard K'lin = Dr. Bernard Klein. And yes, you read that correctly. Batman is in the house! The Uthor family? Be nice? Hmm.... Thanks for sticking with this!
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Originally posted by Ultra Woman: <strong> </font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif"> Also, I have no idea who that Dr. K'lin is supposed to be The kryptonian version of Dr. Bernard Klein. did I read right and you got Bruce Wayne into your story? Ruce A'ne, also known as Krypto Bat. Super Kal won without even practicing. Kudos to him. Yup, you got Ruce and Dr. K'lin correct! Krypto Bat. I like it! Will Kal's win have consequences? Stay tuned to find out...
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Originally posted by MrsLuthor: Their prince had won the fight. Yaaay.... though somehow I feel this won't be the last we hear from Lord Nor.... Hi, ML! You would be (very possibly) correct... Thanks for staying with this!
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Oooh, Virginia is here too! I don't remember him ever being thrilled with his princely duties before. Well, we also haven't gotten to see him prior to the whole marriage thing really. But even this verison of Clark loves helping people. Yeah, that would give those Elders a heart-attack! "We're going to need another Trey!" Okay, now I understand the reference above. Well, at least it didn't happen off page Nope, I figured the readers were in the "need to know" category. Kal, she's lying right next to you. You want to do something about it, then stop twiddling your thumbs! On an unrelated note, the palace usage of cold water was up 122%. Rushing? Rushing? They've been married for what? 6 months now! Not really rushing things. Well, considering that they've only been getting along for 2-3 months... Kryptonian Corn Festival! Huh. I swear, I didn't make that connection. I was thinking more along the lines of the Ren. Faires I like to go to in October. :p At least by losing early from not practicing, he'll be able to spend more time not consummating his relationship with his wife. Erm... That makes sense. Kind of like cramming for an exam. Slow and steady. Bingo! "I hear on Earth, they don't do that. We should have run away together when we could, Kal." Kissing is good. I guess it works both ways. He kisses her to stop her from babbling, she kisses him when he's stressed. Precisely! Thank you. <<cough, cough>> Um... DC... missing something from your story there?? LIKE a WHOLE POSTING PART or at least a paragraph... or something? Reaction? Thoughts? A dance? A high-five with Jai? SOMETHING? <<cough>> I played with it, but nothing sounded quite right to me, and sometimes, a reader's imagination needs to roam free? (Note: I originally thought of posting this chapter on the *other* side of the boards, but my muse had other plans.) Didn't Kal say something about not wanting to tire himself out before the big match? Sex doesn't count. Besides, it's more important that Kal stop being such a v...very patient prince.
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What?! Giving up a little too quickly there, Lois? Was the prince THAT disappointing? There, there, Kal. I understand now, why you two didn't want to talk about it. <<Shock>> Kal, you're lying to the Mrs.! Not intentionally...Okay, maybe a little. Okay, a groin shot. What does it take to be disqualified from this event anyway? For a fighter to KILL someone? That seems a little extreme, before intervention. Neither Nor or Lux are going to be happy with this, you know that, right? They are going to say Kal cheated. And enact vengence. And if you're going to tick off some noble family the Uthor family aren't the ones to anger, right? Let me guess. It's going to be contested by the Uthor family and a rematch will be demanded? A rematch where Nor cheats? Or tries to kill Kal? Or kidnaps Lois and holds her hostage until Kal makes a dive? And of course, Daddy dearest (that would be Jor-El Daddy) is going to say, "Nice job, son. It doesn't really count since you hit him in the crotch though." Erm...not quite. Ooooh. I see evilness ahead in this story. Time for a romantic interlude as Lois nurses Kal back to health? How about most of a chapter? I don't have any black SUVs but I do still have that guy with the ax (from the top of the post) on payroll. And a box of tomatoes is arriving soon. So, ROMANCTIC INTERLUDE? <hides under the bed>
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Reading the other FDK was very enlightening. I caught the Dr. Klein, but knowing that it was you, Vicki, I just assumed that the Bruce was Bill Church, Jr. So, now I know that you can think of other Bruces. <bg>
You snuck in a little light loving, huh? No wonder Kal wanted to get the match over...he was in a hurry to get back to his honeymoon. And poor Lois, having to watch that perfect body and face get mauled! Enough to make any woman take a dull hatchet to her hubby's attacker. I thought you showed a lot of restraint!
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Wow, that was a whirlwind. I would have liked a bit more reaction to making love the first time. Maybe an nfic section or at least how it was for them. The fight was interesting too. I am glad they are finally truly husband and wife. Laura
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Originally posted by angelsgmaw: Reading the other FDK was very enlightening. I caught the Dr. Klein, but knowing that it was you, Vicki, I just assumed that the Bruce was Bill Church, Jr. So, now I know that you can think of other Bruces. <bg>
You snuck in a little light loving, huh? No wonder Kal wanted to get the match over...he was in a hurry to get back to his honeymoon. And poor Lois, having to watch that perfect body and face get mauled! Enough to make any woman take a dull hatchet to her hubby's attacker. I thought you showed a lot of restraint!
Keep up the good work. Pat Well, there is no Bruce like Bruce Campbell, that's for sure. (Except for, well, my Dad.) I did try to sneak in a little waffy-loving before throwing poor Kal to Nor. But I agree that a dull axe would be too good of a punishment for what Nor did!
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Originally posted by Laurach: Wow, that was a whirlwind. I would have liked a bit more reaction to making love the first time. Maybe an nfic section or at least how it was for them. The fight was interesting too. I am glad they are finally truly husband and wife. Laura Duly noted. I'm taken up the matter with my muse, and am patiently awaiting to see what she might churn out between now and the time I polish it for the archive. Thanks!
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Shooting stars and finally a full and loving marriage. I like the 'closed doors' scene of their lovemaking, adds a bit of mystery. Glad to see Lois is spending more time with the rest of the family. She is a happier person now that's she part of a close knit family. Lux Uthor son's are now on the scene, can Daddy and his usual machinations be far behind? I was interesting to see Nor as Lux's son and that he has a nasty habit of permanently dismissing those who displease him. This is where the focus of the story is off Lois and Kal and turned onto external matters. Ruce A'ne? Now that's different! When do we get to see more of this close friend of the royal family? Love Dr. K'lin making an appearance as well, maybe he can find a way to fix Kal's trick knee? Which brings me to another thought. Kyrpton's technology should be waay better than what we are seeing here...just a thought. This has been a great chapter and as always I await more!
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Ut oh, hitting below the belt! Naughty, naughty.
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quote: Their prince had won the fight. Yaaay.... though somehow I feel this won't be the last we hear from Lord Nor... I agree with MrsLuthor: Nor is evil Be careful, Kal.
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Hi, Morgana! Shooting stars and finally a full and loving marriage. I like the 'closed doors' scene of their lovemaking, adds a bit of mystery. Thanks! I'm still puttering with the idea of expanding that a little bit. Glad to see Lois is spending more time with the rest of the family. She is a happier person now that's she part of a close knit family. Very much so. Lux Uthor son's are now on the scene, can Daddy and his usual machinations be far behind? I was interesting to see Nor as Lux's son and that he has a nasty habit of permanently dismissing those who displease him. This is where the focus of the story is off Lois and Kal and turned onto external matters. Not much good can come of that, huh? Ruce A'ne? Now that's different! When do we get to see more of this close friend of the royal family? Love Dr. K'lin making an appearance as well, maybe he can find a way to fix Kal's trick knee? Which brings me to another thought. Kyrpton's technology should be waay better than what we are seeing here...just a thought. Ruce will be back, I promise. I have toyed a little with the technology...not sure yet if I will alter some of this before prepping for the archive. This has been a great chapter and as always I await more! Thanks so much!
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Originally posted by KenJ: Ut oh, hitting below the belt!
Naughty, naughty. Man's gotta do what a man's gotta do. Especially against someone ruthless.
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