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If any of you know more about brain chemistry that I do, you are welcome to point out where I might have done better.

Comments here please.

Bob

Nice part, I liked the way the scientist and Lois's Mom crystallized the problem. I like that Ellen had good questions.

Looking forward to more.

The only way I can see you finishing it in three more parts is if part 7 leaves tham apart and part 8 starts five years later, when Lois has calmed down and worked through her feelings.

Bob,

Personally, my choice would have been to go to Star Labs, not Lexlabs. That will just give Luthor information he shouldn't have.

I guess they don't have to comply with patient confidentiality as a hospital would or else Ellen wouldn't have been able to get the report.

Were I to be in Clark's shoes, I'd fly her to Las Vegas. Then it would be fait accompli.

Deal with it after the fact if they come up with an antidote.

Aww, poor Clark and Lo-Lo. ^^ Although, I suppose it's good that Lois is showing signs of her old self. Maybe the secret of curing her is to keep ticking her off?

The science was easy enough to follow, by the way. Although of course, I have no idea if any of it is true or not.

Was surprised to see Ellen, though in retrospect, I should've guessed that Lois' parents would probably find out and would *definitely* not be amused. What makes it worse is that, really, technically, he is on shaky ground here. I'm not a psychiatrist or a lawyer, but might the Lanes try to have Clark arrested for taking advantage of Lois's altered/impaired state?

It all made me wonder more, though: what to Martha and Jonathan think of this? Do they even know, yet? You mentioned All Shook Up in the beginning, and in the original episode, Clark's parents came to Metropolis. Did that still happen? Or, since Lois was there to help him recover, maybe he was able to call home and tell them not to worry? So do they know yet, or not?

(And naturally, as soon as Lois said that she would only be staying with Clark for a few days, I knew she was fibbing. )

Please keep the parts coming!

ETA:
Ooh, forgot to mention--

3 whole week, wow. I missed this detail on my first read.

She's still here.

And still with Clark.

They made it through Nightfall. That would be an interseting story.

Lolo has a backbone and is still having things her way.

Clark: This is the best of both worlds. Lois intensity commanding something that has only ever been wanted by Lolo, sitting right beside her on the couch.

Lolo: See Clark, we should have gotten married. Next she is going to threaten to have me declared mentally incapable and force decisions on me. If we were married, she would not have that option.

Lolo: Clark is so much better than Luthor.

Lolo: He usually brought dinner in.

Lolo: Less than I the number of times I kissed Clark. Hmm, unless you count lunches as well, and then I have to make sure I counted up all the times Clark and I kissed. Let's see, there was the time on the plane, and that one night in November, and I think I snuck one in while we were in his hometown.

See, I said they should not have let people with Lex Labs get involved.

See, I said they should have gotten married. Then she could not claim he does not love her.

Hopefully she will remember when she recovers.

Which is why he should marry her, to show that they have something. OK, some will say that having the ring means something, but marriage means more.

I am pretty sure they would have to go through the legal proceedings of having her declared mentally incapacitated first. So I am pretty sure they currently have no actionable grounds on Clark. The fact that Ellen is trying to get Lois to move back on her own suggests that she is not truly mentally incapbable. If she was truly mentally incappable Ellen would want Lois with her or in an institution.

A general comment WRT the Kents and Nightfall. Clark did take Lo to meet with his parents at the end of the first week. So, they know that Lo is in on the secret. This means that when Nightfall happened, they had no reason to come to Metropolis. Lo was more than capable of helping him through his amnesia.

I guess I need to clarify this before the story goes to archive.
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Framework4: Yes, Ellen was making very good points. If she would have been able make those points without being so obtuse, perhaps her daughter might have listened. I will comment on this in time.


Ken: The reason they are at Lex Labs is that Lex is funding the research into the cure. Remember his parting words from Chapter 4. He would use his own facilities. Did Ellen say that she saw the report? If so, I need to fix that. Ellen only knows what Lois told her on the phone. Then Ellen was able to talk with Dr. Jensen, but Dr. Jensen didn’t tell her anything specific to Lois's case. She told her some generic information about Revenge victims and asked Ellen to come in and provide information about pre-Revenge Lois for use in their research. (At least, that was all she was supposed to have said.)


Queen of Capes: I believe if/when Lo-Lo has been around for a while, there would be a lot more of Lois there. As for the science, the Amygdala and ACC do pretty much what I said. One interesting note, as I was wrapping up my research, I turned to Beverly and said that if I understand the science correctly, if the ACC were not working properly, it sounds like a person would end up with something very close to bipolar disorder. I did some more research and that turned out to be correct and a compromised ACC is often implicated in that disease.

I hope the armadillo joke wasn’t too lame. I couldn’t resist.

As for your other observations and/or questions, keep reading.


John: See my note at the top for some of this. Still, it could be fun. I wonder if Lex tried to get her to come to his shelter? However, most of the rest of the story would be N/A. Per my note above, Lex is funding the research and doing it with Lex Labs. They probably should. However, I still think Clark would have a hard time crossing that line. (Yes, I think he’d have a harder time with that than he has simply sleeping together.) I sense a pattern to your position on this issue. This is precisely correct! I think this is very important. Lois is still in there. As long as she under the influence of Revenge, she won’t be Lois, but I believe more of Lois’s traits will surface.

So, I do have to say that you are correct that there would be serious advantages for them if they’d gotten married. However, they didn’t.


Thank you all.
Chapter 6 will be along in a few hours.

Bob

Ooh, you tease! :p

Joy!

Well, if Cat tried the same moves on Clark, she maybe would no longer be on good terms with Lo-lo. Hopefully, Superman would have returned faster, with Lo-lo there telling him who he really is.

Things are not looking so good. I'm not sure how you're going to resolve this in three more parts.

Corrina.

John: I think that Cat had a lot of potential but the writers didn't know how to handle her character. There are a few flashes where they had a clue, but not very often. I love to write Cat, but I see her as having much more death that we usually saw in the show. I've always seen Cat as an intelligent and capable woman with a wild side.

As for Nightfall, going into that story with Lois knowing the secret is a plot-untwist. At least it would invalidate the story per the episode. I think you could still have some fun with that story, but it would be completely different than we saw.

Corrina: I keep seeing comments like that.

Bob

Right. The not having to worry about where she is? The warm body beside him? The female presence? The fact that he’s got an almost-Lois at his place?

Let me guess. She lost more and more clothes during the conversation until he caved, right?

yeah, I’ll imagine Clark’s suffering through it like a true trooper.

Right. You skipped over Honeymoon! That should have been fun, them not flipping for the bed. And then there’s the amnesia. Cat would not have gone after Clark but he would have looked like a deer in the headlights when Lo-lo took him home. And we didn’t get M&J’s reactions.

Michael

Michael: Yeah, HiM and ASU might have been interesting, but I wanted to keep this simpler. Thanks. I tried to make this as close as possible to real brain chemistry. Whether or not Revenge could do what we say here, the functions of the Amygdala and the ACC should be correct. Now there's an idea that has some potential. It would explain a lot!

Bob

Your stories are always a special treat on the scientific front.

/nods/

Michael