I like the way you portray the characters and their feelings.
“You’re not much older than I am, and you did a good job raising Clark,” Perry said. Their son had been one of the best investigative reporters the editor had ever had the privilege of knowing, and one of the best men, even without the Superman persona.
“If we’d done a good job, we wouldn’t be having this conversation,” Jonathan said sadly. “Or maybe we might, but it would have been Clark giving you the message, not some stranger. If we’d done a good job, he wouldn’t have felt so alone . . . he wouldn’t have done what he did to himself and everyone around him.”
“Jonathan, it’s not the baby’s fault Clark’s not here,” Martha said.
I think this part sums up everything the elder Kents are feeling. Insecurity, guilt, but also the need to help the infant Clark.
“Whose kid?” Sam asked.
“It’s complicated, Dad,” Lucy began.
“It always is,” Ellen put in.
Couldn't keep from chuckling. It's so much like Ellen to say exactly that... The way you write them makes me a little envious.
“I didn’t ask. She sounded pretty strung out on the phone. When Perry and I got to the hospital where she said was, she’d already left. The description the nurse gave me matched a woman I went out with a couple times nine, ten months ago and the names matched on the paperwork. She’d put me down as the father, so unless somebody can prove otherwise, I’m a daddy.”
“So, when are you getting rid of her?” Ellen demanded, finishing off her glass of wine.
“And if this ‘person’ comes back, demanding the child?” Ellen asked. There was a vicious bite in her tone.
Ellen is not just playing the devil's advocate, is she? She really is against Lucy and Jimmy keeping the girl.
Clark Kent, Lois’s partner, was also dead. So much waste, three lives snuffed out over one miscalculation.
Oh, Lucy still does not know? That doesn't bode well...
We named her Lois,” Jimmy said. “Lois Joanne, after her aunt. After my friend.”
This is so incredibly sweet, telling not only of Jimmy's and Lucy's respect for Lois, but also of their commitment to each other.
Can't wait for more!
