Wow, what a great response!
You guys are definitely fun to write for!
First, in case anyone missed it, I'll point out again that the "unspool" thing wasn't my idea -- CC Aiken came up with the basic concept. But she graciously threw it out there, so I ran with it
Thanks very much, CC, this was a lot of fun!
Second... I'm thinking of changing the title to "Chaos Unspool" -- or do you think that would be too cryptic? Of course, it's not like "Art Appreciation" is all that descriptive, either... hmmm...
Jen, you got it -- Lois remembers being angry, but she also remembers forgiving him. I can sketch that out a little bit more, though.
The ending line (parting shot
) just floated into my brain, as I was approaching the end of the story. And good ending lines can be hard to come by! I really feel like I shouldn't take much credit at all for this; it was wonderfully easy to write. I love it when that happens!
Caroline... sequel? I hadn't planned one, but you've got me curious, now, and I have a few ideas... I don't promise anything will come of them, but we'll see
Thanks!
Glad you liked it even if it was confusing, Anna! <g> I've tried to make it a little bit clearer in revisions -- instead of Lois just beginning to see visions out of nowhere, now she knows that "unspool" is the trigger. She still has no idea why, of course...
Irene, glad you liked the art gallery! I wanted to show Dan shooting himself in the foot, and I *didn't* want to deal with dinner, so I figured a museum would be a good way to occupy his attention while Lois's mind drifted. And considering some of the gifts he gave her...
Tank, I wouldn't call it "pressure" exactly
More like a kick in the butt
The original was pretty large, though... And thanks for the idea. It's actually pretty rare to see a new idea like this, these days, so you deserve kudos for that!
I'm up against the gremlin limit here, so I'll go to a new post...
