I like the story a lot!
But two things...
don't post parts so quickly... even I have problems to read them!!
You'll get more readers if you leave some time to read the parts... and it would allow you to have a buffer.
Edit the post instead of reposting again, please... it's better, sometimes I don't know which post to read. Howver if you send the story to the Archive there people will be able to read the definitive version, so don't worry if people don't see the edits.
Jose
