Hey Poussin
Congratulations on your first fic! This is a really funny idea, and I like the original way you've chosen to tell it, with Lois telling the story of her idiocy to her son.
I can just imagine her mind shooting off in all the wrong directions - LOL!
Yeah, as you say, you've got some grammar and tense problems here - but, heck, you should hear my French!
There is
no way on earth I could write a story in French. You'll get better.
I was delighted to see Archbish offering to help you - FoLCs are fantastic.
So, looking forward to part 3...
Wendy
