LOVE this story, Corrina. But, I'm a big fan of your work, so I figured I would
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Great concept, wonderful characterization (you are always so spot-on with the characters), and amazing places to go with Part 2...
Your dialog was perfect, and I loved the influx of poems created by everyone. As was mentioned before, you really captured everyone really well with their poetry...it all 'fit' what you'd think they would write like. Especially Clark's poem about friendship:
A friend is a blessing
Someone there in good times and bad
Someone who sees without judging
And shares the moments both happy and sad
A friend is a gift of memories
To catalogue, keep and store
But oh, how friendship batters the heart
That yearns for so much more
I mean, really...could that capture Clark's thoughts any better at this time-frame in the series? Friendship, wanting more. Craving a relationship with Lois. Loved it, and also how you've written Clark in this story. The way that he falls for Lois--so fully, so completely--really is what captured my heart when I first watched the show so so many years ago. It's easy to picture everything unfolding in this story b/c you have an incredible ability to really get inside the character's heads--Clark, Lois, everyone. It really feels like L&C
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Great concept of a way for the Planet to help...they'd have the resources, they'd have the talent. I can 'see' the potential of this type of project helping and raising some funding. And...I can see Lois fighting it initially--just like how the story started out.
Can't wait to read the rest...
Laura
