I really enjoyed this story. The original scene in the pilot is such a 'moment' between Clark and Lex--sizing each other up, creating the tension that will only ever build between them. Expanding on this scene--great idea!
What stood out most to me, what really excited me about this story, was the challenging atmosphere. It was there originally in the Pilot, but you were able to build upon it wonderfully. You've created a hostile feeling in the piece, but done in a subtle way, so it comes off as brilliantly subdued (if that makes sense
). It's written politely condescending--they are totally trying to out do and outwit the other--and in such a scholarly way. This type of thing is so very much Lex at his best (and Lex KNOWS this), but with Clark? With Clark he's met his match
.
Lex glanced at Lois, but then looked back at Clark. And Clark’s face betrayed him with a nervous glance at Lois, a look filled with unhidden unprofessional interest. Lex raised an eyebrow slightly when Clark looked back. He silently asked the question, because every battle should ultimately earn a prize. Clark’s eyes narrowed slightly with determination.
Awesome!
This paragraph has so much power to it. Lex immediately can see Clark's heart, as far as it concerns Lois. He (Lex) knows he has a way get at Clark, a way to hurt him.
Yeah--I love this last line
! Great way to get the point across. They will be enemies till the end.
Excellent story!
Laura
