This is really good! Very well written - you have a nice style and clearly a lot of talent. And you've written a very sympathetic Lana - a refreshing point of view, actually. Hazel, if she were around, would love this.
Just a couple of lines I have to cite:
Becoming Superman—what a ridiculous name, she thought briefly—might be good for him in the long run, even though it had robbed her, and him, of Clark Kent.
Awww!
And, yes, it did, didn't it?
And this:
“Who was she, really?”
His eyes, deep like a dark pool of water she was still in danger of drowning in, told her that he was unsure of the answer himself. Lana realized that, even though he had not known this woman, he had sacrificed everything for her, and he himself did not understand why.
“Someone who only stays until the wind changes,” he said after a moment, his voice laced with a misery she had never noticed there before. But perhaps she had been deaf, just like she had been blind, when it came to his true feelings, his hopes and his dreams.
Wow. Just wow. Both the 'someone who only stays until the wind changes' line and Lana finally seeing the misery in Clark.
Just lovely, C_A! Now, I hope you're going to submit this to the Archive, right?
Wendy
