I really liked it.
"You don't want to fall for me, Farmboy," she said shakily, her eyes on Clark's hands holding her own. "I'm broken." Her eyes closed for a moment. "And I don't think you can fix me," she whispered.
I absolutely love this part. It shows the vulnerability and insecurities of Lois.
It's a nice story on itself, but if you feel the urge to write more ot it, who am I to stop you?
ETA: I just noticed you have already posted part 2, so I'm gonna go read it.
