Oh, wow! This is fantastic writing! A fantastic part really! And I haven't read This Child Belongs to You, or New Birth, as LaurieD pointed out, YET, that is. They're on my to-read list!! I wanted to sneak a peak at this one anyway and I'm glad I did.
Clark's confusion is so palpable; I just love how you've written it...
His hands had sought the normal zip, only to find one didn't exist... not in the showy red underpants, and he'd been afraid of succumbing to a humiliating accident before he'd found the desired opening, under the briefs. He couldn't be sure, but wasn't the normal fashion to wear briefs underneath a suit?
And just exactly what kind of suit was he wearing... or not wearing as the case might be?
he discovered a patch where the hair was rough and stubbly and he could feel the traces of a small, ridged scar, as if the wound was recent. He searched further over his head and found a similar spot near the base of his skull. What had caused those injuries?
This is so great! To start the story with an injured Clark and we're wondering what happened, but so it he. That's such a great way to start a story!
And Lois...
“We've always had this connection, you know. In my heart, I always knew it, long before my head would accept it... but it's always been there. And now....” The tears were coursing down her cheeks, impossible to stop.
“And now?” Martha's question was whispered, realizing she didn't want to hear the answer.
“Nothing, Martha.” Though they were far apart, the silence in both homes was palpable. “I've tried and tried to reach him, but there's nothing there. Not in my my head or my heart. Martha, Clark is just... gone!”
Okay, WHERE is Clark that the connection has been broken!!? He's hurt, but he's alive, so shouldn't she feel it??? It's like when Clark hit that nasty asteroid in For the Greater Good - and Lois felt the connection break and assumed he was dead! - all over again! I hate when that happens, when the connection breaks! I hate it (even though I love it plot-wise and it keeps me gnawing my fingernails, waiting impatiently for more)! And while I hate the broken connection in one way... I love when it comes back, and after your nice disclaimer I have this faith that you'll do just that! So I'll just read... and wait...
Nearly a year had passed since Superman had left to help out with the Earthquake in Korea and there had been not one single sighting of him anywhere in the world since.
For a time, Lois had convinced herself that he'd been lying hurt somewhere... perhaps had amnesia from a head trauma. Most people considered The Man of Steel to be invulnerable, but Lois knew differently.
You really know angst, don't you
This is so good!
Okay, one more... I love the beginning of this final paragraph...
Often in the dark of night she would remember Clark's sadly prophetic words.
It has this dark and haunted feel to it and gave me chills. Really nice
Part 2 please!!
~NICOLE
