Hi, Jenni,
At long last (after 4 weeks) I'm back on line.
The first thing I did was to download both chapters 1 and 2. As I'd expected, I was enthralled. You let us know the story would start with a wham, thank you for that. And your descriptions made me feel I was right there in the cell with "the man." What I like a lot about your stories is that you let us know what's going on within the framework of the characters' actions. E.g., you let us know "the man" was wearing a blue spandex suit with the briefs over the top by letting us watch him in a very natural function. I like that!
Your balance of narrative description and conversation makes for a very intimate feeling about the characters and their predicaments.
The only thing I don't like is having to wait to find out what's happening next. But, I'll not wait until the story gets posted to the archives so that I can read it "in the whole."
Thanks for giving us your time and talent.
Marge
