Hi Queenie,
I just finished reading your story and my original assessment based on the first couple of paragraphs stands: I wish my writing were a tenth as good as yours. And it is not merely idle flattery; it is a simple fact. For example, your writing excels at engaging the reader's senses. You also are an expert at letting the reader know things without explicitly telling them. And of course, your use of humour is legendary. I especially enjoyed the diaper reference at the end, not to mention the "I-Should-Be-Asleep O'Clock above. (I think our muses conspired to keep us both awake last night. I had actually had my main idea for the story as soon as I read the challenge the day it was posted, but it was only last night/this morning that the proper hook for the story came to me.)
Romance may not be your wheelhouse, but that doesn't mean you can't do it well when you wish. This story is definitely a case in point.
I hope your muse pays you visits a lot more frequently, but that she does so at more convenient times.
Be well,
Lynn
p.s., I second Bakasi's request for the continuation of this story, should you and your muse be so inclined.
