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Do you think it needs more? There's a really good chance I'm missing something in the flow of this.

All I can think of is a little more background about why Henderson would leave Metropolis? After all, he is Lois' favorite good guy besides Clark!

Have not finished reading the story yet. Work calls. razz

Morgana

A writer's job is to think of new plots and create characters who stay with you long after the final page has been read. If that mission is accomplished than we have done what we set out to do, which is to entertain and hopefully educate.