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It shows. The reason the reader can tell that Kathy and Annie spent LOTS of time and effort on this point is because the reader doesn't notice it until deep in the story. You two have managed to pique the interest of your readers and involved them in the characters so intimately that the main conflict (how will they resolve this romantic conundrum?) sneaks up on the reader. We don't quite realize it's there until the ramifications of the conflict appear - will they stay together, who will move to join the other, and when will they cross that pesky threshold of intimacy? This is the main dramatic conflict in the story, and y'all never slapped us in the face with it! You made us find it ourselves, and it's quite a brilliant strategy. You have take the "show, don't tell" precept of storytelling to an exquisite precipice of tension. In face, I daresay the readers are experiencing more tension than the two main characters.

Not only is this a sweet love story that quietly and gently demands to be embraced and cherished, it's a master class on writing. Brava to both of you!