"but most of the big questions will be answered in the sequel."
Yaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!!!!! SO here for THIS!
“Nearly six hundred in the barn.”
That wasn’t enough.
Oh no!!!
Clark shook his head. “Not unless…”
“You know you can’t, Clark. It’s too risky. We could lose everything.”
“Mom…”
I'm so sad about this attitude for Martha. This was always Jonathan's stance, not hers. But with the farm resting on Clark's shoulders now, and the grief for her husband, this totally tracks. It just makes me so sad.
For Clark.
For her.
And for Jonathan’s farm.
The way you phrased this is SO SAD.
Clark had always wanted to marry.
This, somehow, is the saddest thing yet.
With that, she walked up the stairs and into the room she had shared with Jonathan for over thirty years.
This is just emotionally brutal.
“I have an appointment in the barn.”
“Lois!” he said, ignoring the anticipation soaring through his heart.
Yay! This choice makes so much sense for her. I know this pair is always a good match, but I feel like it's even clearer why She's such a good match for Him in this story.
He added a little bit of extra heat to hurry along the process.
I love that we immediately see him using his powers for Lois, after he and Martha just had a disagreement about it.
His shoulders weren’t aching, but his heart was.
“I don’t think ‘wise’ fits anywhere into this mess,” Lois said.
lol. Funny! And that really sounds like her.
Clark went outside to the porch. He could smell the hay waiting in the fields. He could easily go and bale it now. He didn’t need the baler. He could do it quickly and silently.
Just goooooo! Ugh, I feel his frustration here! Nice work capturing that!
Jack would be here tomorrow.
How would that affect Lois?
Love that his first thought here is about her.
Farm Boy.
It got him every time she called him that.
Lois’s heart thumped through a couple of beats.
It was Lucy’s face – masculinised – looking back at her.
Oh, whoa! This is crazy! Such a big swing - to change the composition of the Lane family. I'm really interested in where this goes. And the structure/writing here absolutely made me stop in my tracks - so well done!
Clark rose. “Good morning, Lois,” he said. “This is Jack. Jack, this is Lois.”
I am totally fascinated that he didn't give Jack her last name.
This whole next section is SO tense. I don't know which part to even quote, but the whole section is great.
Clark stopped the truck at the start of the first row and looked at Lois. “What’s wrong?” he asked.
I can only imagine he heard her heart rate go off the scale when she saw Jack.
“What can I do?”
“Get the hay in the barn.”
I really love this version of her matched to this version of him.
This whole story has such a sweet, delicious melancholy to it. You have a unique voice.
