This premise is very intriguing.
And this Lois Lane is very dangerous.
We have a sixteen-year-old girl who has what the readers know is Superman's powers, and her only comfort is in talking to her adoptive mother's picture. Her new parents (wonderful characterizations of both Sam and Ellen, by the way) have neither the time nor the inclination to either love or even learn about this young lady in their charge. She's far too isolated to be a part of their dysfunctional family.
Yet, Lois has learned to deal with not only the often bewildering changes of puberty, but the potentially terrifying stress of being totally, completely, irretrievably different from not only every one of her classmates, but from everyone in the entire world. She has no friends, no confidants, no advisors, no one to hug her and tell her that she's loved no matter what, no one to hear her fears and help to ease them - no one. She doesn't date, she doesn't socialize with other girls, she can't talk to any of the adults in her household, and she has no outlet for the everyday stress that everyone builds up in his or her life.
No wonder she reverts to child speech with the picture of Mama.
This woman made it to the Daily Planet at the age of twenty-six apparently without anyone knowing just how special she is. Her self-esteem is almost non-existent, and what little positive self-image she has is all knotted up in her job performance. A human in that situation is a candidate for either a cardiac event or a mental breakdown of some sort, and Lois's body isn't vulnerable, so that leaves -
Clark had better get on the scene quickly. The dragons she's dedicated herself to fighting are inexhaustible, and she desperately needs someone to like her for herself, much less to love her. And, seeing that she has so little human sympathy (understandable given her upbringing), what happens to the dragons she catches? Does she bring them to justice or deal out retribution in her own inimitiable style?
I wonder if Clark will be a simple, rustic hack from Nowhereseville in this story? Or will you have two Kryptonians reporting the news and fighting crime in Metropolis? Please don't abandon this fascinating glimpse into the "what-if" of Lois Lane!
I just realized that I have neglected to point out that the writing itself in this story is first-rate. We feel the pressure Lois is under at all stages of her life. We perceive the sense of total abandonment that pervades her life, save for her relationship with her Mama. You show us how her attempts to reach out and build bridges to others have all been slapped down with refrigerated clubs, and her heart is surrounded with a steel curtain just to allow Lois to survive. Wonderful! I wish I could write like this. Please, please keep it up!
