Good addition to the story. Love the way you make your characters come alive!

One thing, I would suggest dropping the " ' " in front of the word "phone". Over here, "phone" is a word unto itself and not thought of as a short form of "telephone". Having the " ' " in there is somewhat distracting. wink

James


“…with God everything is possible.” Matthew 19:26.


Also read Nan's Terran Underground!