Gaahh! I'm so late leaving FDK, aren't I, DJ? And I have very little time now. I just wanted you to know I'm still reading and very, very much enjoying this story.
I just loved Clark's conversation with Chad! DJ, you write these two young guys so irresistibly well and charmingly. Just consider:
“Well, I’ve got a proposition for you then.”
Proposition? I raise an eyebrow at him questioningly.
Hah, good start! Let's see the ring first, Chad!
I smile to myself. All work and no play make Lois Lane a very... *intriguing* woman. What makes her tick? There has to be something besides work.
And Clark would love to be your... eh... lollipop....
Anyway, Lois and Clark go snooping around Luthor's inner sanctum... well, his moderately inner sanctum. I loved this little snippet:
I see something that catches my interest almost immediately, an ornate and exquisite display of ancient weaponry – swords, pistols, even a primitive looking crossbow.
I bend down to examine the collection more thoroughly feeling my heartstrings tug with slight regret at deciding not to take more of those trips I had planned after college, those trips to other continents, other countries, other cultures. I had taken a few, but not nearly as many as I had originally planned to. My plans had changed. I had chosen instead to be with Lana.
Yes, just think of all those things you should have seen, Clark, but you chose to be with Lana instead.
And this is great:
I turn around and almost run right into the tip of a sword that’s being pointed directly at me. The man holding the sword is Luthor, calm and cool as a cucumber. So that’s how he wants to play it huh? Two can play that game. “Macedonian,” I remark nonchalantly.
Lovely!!!!!
Anyway... a few more things happen with Luthor, though nothing serious, and Clark returns to Chad's place. He calls Lana and starts having doubts about their relationship:
I frown at the phone as I hang it up. Something dad said to me earlier in the day comes to my mind. ‘Is she really the *one*? ...She expects so much from you.’
Is she really the one?’
Yes. Isn’t she?
Beautifully written, DJ. And no, Clark, Lana isn't 'the one'.
Okay, fascinating! Great Clark POV. Great charm. Clark is so innocently youthful somehow, as if he had never been seriously hurt here. So, by the way, is Lois, though she is perhaps more innocently youthfully confident, but whatever...
Lovely premise! Okay, I know you have posted part three already... I'll post FDK on that one later, OK?
Ann
